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Kiritoga
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2023-08-01 08:19

Don’t get me wrong the novel is good, but there’s a lot of flaws to it especially with the character build up and I’m talking about level wise after 400 chapters, He is still in third order even though many around him is already ranked up. I mean the mere fact that he almost died in the last 50 chapters should, tell you how it is. I mean he has so much experience points saved up that he can jump all the way to the fifth peak order but the author use the excuse of he needs to build his foundation but it’s already been over 100 chapters or even more 300 Now let’s talk about the writing quality, to be honest, many of you might not like it in the beginning, but it does get better, but then after 350 chapters in he changes the writing completely. As in if you’re not used to Archaic way of writing, which is pretty much old English Shakespeare, etc then you’re gonna have a pretty much a hard time reading the story Now let’s go to the kingdom building in my personal opinion I enjoyed it. I mean the mere fact that he was able to build his empire from scratch after many trials, and tribulations is dope. Now, if you were here for the romance that I can say to you that so far, it’s been great in my opinion, at least from my perspective personally, the relationship does not look like it’s forced and it takes over hundreds of chapters for things to develop and etc. Plus it’s a harem, so plus for many of you. Overall I gave the story a 3.6 don’t get me wrong. The story is good in the beginning going up to around 300 but I feel like everything just started going downhill and the story became repetitive. One thing you will tend to notice a lot is every time the author explains a certain character. He will repeat the same thing, 40 to 50 to 60 chapters later and you’ll just sit there and ask yourself why is he writing this because we’ve already covered it. Trust me if you pay attention to details, you will notice it. I do hope you guys read the story and form your own opinion but this is my opinion and I’m gonna drop the story. Of course I will come back to see how it goes but after reading 400+ chapters. I just can’t take it anymore. I feel like it has went downhill instead. To the author, I don’t know if you’re gonna read this or not but I wish you all the best and hope blessings go your way.

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This review basically covers my major points except maybe how rough the grammar errors are at times

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