Review Detail of Jojo26032908 in One Piece: Reborn as Enel

True review part 2 Against my better judgement I continued reading. Lo and behold it actually improved from 6/10 to 7/10 and I got caught in a binge. Most of the flaws are in the first 60 chapters. After having post nut clarity of finishing the binge, I thought yeah I enjoyed it...but is this really One Piece? Where's the whacky adventure, why is the story compressed into one year of rushing to put out fires, brief conversations before moving to training. Some slice of life would greatly improve the story. To be fair, I like the redeemed Akainu, no harem gang and Robin ship. Here are some more of those first third of the story flaws: "He wasn't goint to be selling out Luffy anytime soon. He wanted the straw hat wearing pirate to appear at Marineford." Pointless thought, he won't be selling him out ever. "Sure!Let's go." The two of them started heading for the first level almost instantly What's the point of "almost instantly", write they went for the first level, no pointless adjectives. "She simply scoffed and turned around." "Enel simply cleched his fist" "grabbing a newspaper with his earlobes and randomly skimming trough" "Enel simply stood up" "Enel simply scowled" "Enel simply winced" "Enel simply advised" "Bonney randomly sat down" "Enel's arm had stopped rubbing her back randomly" "Bonney simply scowled" "simply sighed" Author should stop adding "simply" and "randomly" and "without any issue" for no reason. I don't believe Marines would be foolish enough to give Enel all the training he wants before he proved his loyalty trough service. Anyone can get a few bounties, show up for training and then go become a pirate or revolutionary. Enel' postponing his leadership duties was definitely not sus... "he sunk a few pirate ships out of boredom" Didn't Enel consider whether he is in the right to kill pirates with unkown crimes? For all he knows he might be killing the likes of Straw Hats. Sure it's a safe bet that pirates are evil, but some of them could be petty criminals or adventurers who don't wanna be bothered by the opressive government. Dafuq is with lighnting leaving holes in the sea that start whirlpools? Lightning doesn't do that no matter how strong. What radiation from lightning plasma? Author really doesn't get physics. Enel had to wait for books at Baltigo. How does that make sense, the should have at least some theological books at hand, especially in that massive library. "If he was here for a fight he would've already done something..." Everytime Enel meets a potential enemy/neutral party. Show, don't tell. Daijobu prophecy - Enel believed he could do whatever he wanted and Luffy will have plot armor. That's a stupid assumption.