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2022-06-11 14:07

It improves the quality of the writing a little more. Story development is very fast safe a bit to have more chapters, the way it is I think it will end up in 40~65 chapters and you won't have any more ideas for your book story. Character design is ok but if you improve the mc it will be much better. Background of the world; I feel like something's missing but I don't know how to tell you author.

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No worries if you Can think of what is missing lmk

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