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MrHollow
MrHollowLv12yr
2022-06-26 19:32

A great fanfic. Has really big potential, but has some flows, like missing comas and dots. I really recommend

GOT:Spartan summoning system

Thrust
3.8
16 Chs

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N0_Hope
N0_HopeLv2

Writing Quality : 3/5 Stability of Updates : 4/5 Story Development : 3/5 Character Design : 3/5 World Background : 4/5 The main problem is not the grammar but the way the author has written the story . I'm not a native speaker but I can tell that I've read many stories and some of them have a proper way of writting and others ... It's not a bad thing, the author worked hard and tried but I would suggest reading official novels to have a reference point on the dialogues.

2yr
Vassago
VassagoLv12

I came into this on the assumption that it would be about a guy who was able to summon Spartans and a system around that Idea. instead we have your basic dude whi will automatically become a master of combat along will the warriors from for honor who put into a realistic setting become the equivalent of what lu bu from the the three kingdoms was said to be like in battle and to top it all off the mc goes for the basic wishes that every tom and harry does.

2yr
Slxxpy
SlxxpyLv13

Basic Basic Basic Basic Basic Basic Basic.

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Derek_Morales
Derek_MoralesLv14

It has great potential and great imagination. Can't wait to read more. I hope you as the author can slow the pace a little and focus on world/story/background building. I think the biggest mistake many authors make is a to fast pace of a story, little to no time for character development. But I enjoy read both your stories on web novel and hope you continue to write.

2yr
Dragonfenixx
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Gd_Sys
Gd_SysLv4

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ZHODIAXK
ZHODIAXKLv3

I don't know broo, It is too cringe for me

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HeartRend
HeartRendLv6

Writing quality: 2 stars - Just read the synopsis and you will understand. Grammer is abyssmal and reading becomes more painful than it should be. Stability of updates: 3 stars - look at chapter list to see update frequency, its sporattic. sometimes with a gap of a day, other times with a gap of 2 weeks. Story dev: 3 stars - idea is interesting, execution not so much. Author has a good imagination, but not the best literary skill. Character design/world backgroud: 2 star - hard to understand and not really built up. 2 stars becasue its a fanfic and people have a frame of reference from canon. Otherwise, not much is built up here. Overall: 2.4 - not recommended for someone new. Only if you are a literary masochist who is used to terrible grammer and botched writing.

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