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2023-05-31 17:19

The story started off really well, but as we passed chapter 200, it began to slow down significantly. There were too many characters introduced that we didn't really care about. At some point, it felt like every chapter was just filler and the story didn't progress at all. Additionally, the main characters doesn't get any stronger beyond chapter 50. Personally, I'm dropping this because it has only gotten worse with each chapter. The story its just not moving.

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Blazuku
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Ahaha...the thing I wanted to focus more on is the other characters, I want them to have some depth as well. Thank you for the review and thank you for reading my novel

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Thefantastictouch
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I write this review after reading 268chapters.At first, I thought this book would have a great future. But as we started nearing this future, I was left disappointed .First,here are the pros : - The author is devoted and constantly improving his writing skills.- The updates are quite regulars .- There's little to no info dumps, and everything is slowly introduced and explained.- The plot isintriguing .- The pace is nor quick nor slow.-There's some comedy.Then, the cons :- The characters are too shallow.There are so many chapters, yet it feels like we don't know enough about the characters. First, the MC. Alan is honestly sooooo annoying.Each time an important thing happens to him, it feels like he will grow as a person. However it's only that. A "feeling" . He is still that mentally weak person whom everyone brags about the potential but that we don't see acting as he should when the situation is dire. The case Ezra Fornum; thefight with the orc( if I remember correctly),were all occasions for him to grow more powerful; both physically and mentally. Yet, it didn't happen.Plus , he is always complainingabout his weakness, which makes hisinexistent progress even more annoying.Also , the mc isn't even a villain until now.(Ps: He is also not smart nor stupid, which some might not like.)Second , the fl . Sabrina's relationship with the Mc is so suprlerficial. Yet the author TELLS us that "they're SO in love! They just do not want to be together for now."Apart from the shallowness of theirrelationship, Sabrina herself feels 2D. Sure,we know about her background. But the fact is that we don't really know her aside from this. What is her goal in life ? What does she like ?What are her pet-peeves?lt feels likeshe's not really a person.And this appliesto every other characters of the book. - The author gave a too powerful cheat to the Mc.The ice dragon breathing technique ( if I remember well) made him go from E rank to C- rank at the first try . So if the technique is so powerful and the Mc wants to be strong, isn't using it( descretly) enough for him to attain his objectives ?There have been so many traumatizing events that him not using the technique sooner doesn't make sense.Moreover , recently( chapter 260 or ), he used it again and only got up to C- rank; which makes it SO obvious that the author is attempting to nerf the Mc. - The feelings are clumsily expressed .I honestly feel so tired of reading paragraphs of Alan rambling about his pain and burden. But if they are not exagerated, the emotions aren't palpable.This all mostly stems from the lackof description of the thing that provokesthese emotions and its possible impactson the Mc or his loved ones.For example, If a character is afraid of something, you can describe the thing accordingly from his/ her perspective . But describing it is not enough.One should also show the impacts of the said thing so the reader, too, genuinely feels how imperative it is for the Mc to win against it.-Last but not least , what are the Mc's goals?It is understandable that Alan is perturbed by the fact that he is only a sort of 'fake Alan Peccator '. However , his confusion shouldn't be stretched out for 100 chapters as it hasbeen the case since now.It seems that rather than thinking pragmatically , the Mc is evolving in his world and waiting for answers, which will not come if he stays as static as he is . All in all, this bookfailed my expectations. Nonetheless, I wish all the best to the author and pray for his improvement .

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