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BlazukuAuthor2yr
2022-07-08 16:26

As a new author who doesn't really know a lot about how to write good stuff, I request you guys to give me 'Constructive' criticism. Whether it's a mistake in my grammar, sentence formation, etc. Also, I'm not doing this just to add another 5-star review to my novel. Definitely Not

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Ashborn1609Lv4

is it a harem?

BlazukuAuthor

no it will not be a harem for the main character.

NObodyLv4

Author-nim can you add academy tag pls....

Sheikh_Haseeb_3370Lv1

The novel itself is good.The characters feel real unlike almost all others novels where the MC remember everything. although there are some grammatical mistakes, it's still a fun read

BlazukuAuthor

ok

NObody:Author-nim can you add academy tag pls....
Sonu_SirajLv14

is this polygamy or mongamy??

Javon_NixonLv14

You made a mistake in the synopsis

Blazuku:ok
BlazukuAuthor

I did? where?

Javon_Nixon:You made a mistake in the synopsis
Ashton_ALv12

you could make good money on this novel

PatrioticZLv15

I will give it a try when there are more chapters

its_LLv3

i will give it a try then

Blazuku:no it will not be a harem for the main character.
Subham_SadhukhanLv3

This novel is very good and character development albeit slow is nice and each mystery is revealed nicely give more screen time to side character (I mean the characters of the novel mc transmigrated into) and I like multiple pov novels

Daoist2OgclHLv1

Villain?

BlazukuAuthor

There are a hundred and more now Ready now?

PatrioticZ:I will give it a try when there are more chapters
IamMountTaiLv13

1. Is there romance? 2. Multiple love interests?

BlazukuAuthor

1:yes there is romance later on in the novel. 2:No, not for our Mc, well not multiple. Basically it won't be a harem

IamMountTai:1. Is there romance? 2. Multiple love interests?
IamMountTaiLv13

Shame. By multiple love interests I don't necessarily mean it would end as harem. Rather, there are multiple heroines interested in the MC. Tho as you don't intend a harem, then only 1 would have their feelings reciprocated. That's what I meant.

Blazuku:1:yes there is romance later on in the novel. 2:No, not for our Mc, well not multiple. Basically it won't be a harem
BlazukuAuthor

Ah, if that was what you meant yes there are going to be a few interested in the mc, however only one wins

IamMountTai:Shame. By multiple love interests I don't necessarily mean it would end as harem. Rather, there are multiple heroines interested in the MC. Tho as you don't intend a harem, then only 1 would have their feelings reciprocated. That's what I meant.
IamMountTaiLv13

Great! I look forward to reading it then. Hope it isn't obvious.

Blazuku:Ah, if that was what you meant yes there are going to be a few interested in the mc, however only one wins
PatrioticZLv15

I will read through it in a few days, I like to binge read

Blazuku:There are a hundred and more now Ready now?
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ThefantastictouchLv4

I write this review after reading 268chapters.At first, I thought this book would have a great future. But as we started nearing this future, I was left disappointed .First,here are the pros : - The author is devoted and constantly improving his writing skills.- The updates are quite regulars .- There's little to no info dumps, and everything is slowly introduced and explained.- The plot isintriguing .- The pace is nor quick nor slow.-There's some comedy.Then, the cons :- The characters are too shallow.There are so many chapters, yet it feels like we don't know enough about the characters. First, the MC. Alan is honestly sooooo annoying.Each time an important thing happens to him, it feels like he will grow as a person. However it's only that. A "feeling" . He is still that mentally weak person whom everyone brags about the potential but that we don't see acting as he should when the situation is dire. The case Ezra Fornum; thefight with the orc( if I remember correctly),were all occasions for him to grow more powerful; both physically and mentally. Yet, it didn't happen.Plus , he is always complainingabout his weakness, which makes hisinexistent progress even more annoying.Also , the mc isn't even a villain until now.(Ps: He is also not smart nor stupid, which some might not like.)Second , the fl . Sabrina's relationship with the Mc is so suprlerficial. Yet the author TELLS us that "they're SO in love! They just do not want to be together for now."Apart from the shallowness of theirrelationship, Sabrina herself feels 2D. Sure,we know about her background. But the fact is that we don't really know her aside from this. What is her goal in life ? What does she like ?What are her pet-peeves?lt feels likeshe's not really a person.And this appliesto every other characters of the book. - The author gave a too powerful cheat to the Mc.The ice dragon breathing technique ( if I remember well) made him go from E rank to C- rank at the first try . So if the technique is so powerful and the Mc wants to be strong, isn't using it( descretly) enough for him to attain his objectives ?There have been so many traumatizing events that him not using the technique sooner doesn't make sense.Moreover , recently( chapter 260 or ), he used it again and only got up to C- rank; which makes it SO obvious that the author is attempting to nerf the Mc. - The feelings are clumsily expressed .I honestly feel so tired of reading paragraphs of Alan rambling about his pain and burden. But if they are not exagerated, the emotions aren't palpable.This all mostly stems from the lackof description of the thing that provokesthese emotions and its possible impactson the Mc or his loved ones.For example, If a character is afraid of something, you can describe the thing accordingly from his/ her perspective . But describing it is not enough.One should also show the impacts of the said thing so the reader, too, genuinely feels how imperative it is for the Mc to win against it.-Last but not least , what are the Mc's goals?It is understandable that Alan is perturbed by the fact that he is only a sort of 'fake Alan Peccator '. However , his confusion shouldn't be stretched out for 100 chapters as it hasbeen the case since now.It seems that rather than thinking pragmatically , the Mc is evolving in his world and waiting for answers, which will not come if he stays as static as he is . All in all, this bookfailed my expectations. Nonetheless, I wish all the best to the author and pray for his improvement .

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