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2022-07-02 15:52

Writing quality: The story is well written the sense that I haven't found any major grammatical mistakes as of yet... Story development: The author has changed many events which were crucial for the character development of Canon Characters... Character Development: something destroyed by the author...examples like major characters sympathizing or just listening to the mc even when he approaches them firstly....brush imagine going to dragon and talking casually ..... u ain't gonna get a gossip buddy for sure... Furthermore the mc has gained mastery over his devil fruit as if it were nothing......this is just a joke to those people who have been training their devil fruit power for years.... Update stability: Well, its good.. World background: nothing much to say about this since this is a fan fiction Lastly, I mean no harm to anyone and am just offering some criticism....But simple acts like ace not losing an arm have a huge effect of the character development and even in the future plot....

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