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Klaymore
KlaymoreLv32yr
2022-06-17 12:01

The author is quite literally telling a story. With this i mean he relies too much on telling instead of showing. It is one of the worst cases of 'telling-not-showing' I've seen in this site. At least when it comes to grammar things are good enough. But the style is the worst. About the story. MC is an observer of the main plot. He becomes OP quickly and decides to take a backseat role to the events of the manga. It's bland and kinda boring but at least it's something I've never seen before in a fanfic. This is for those who get mad at authors for completely changing the original plot. This author instead barely changes anything. Dialogues are cliche and cringy but there is some personality to the main character and the other characters. Only a tiny bit. But at least they're not complete robots. This is something you read when you don't have absolutely anything better to do. Like most stories in this website. I wouldn't say it is the worst thing I've read here, though. It is middle of the pack. Not the worst but not among the good ones.

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Smol_frog
Smol_frogAuthor

Thanks for the input.

Skill_Top
Skill_TopLv1

Can you advise me something preferable rational and selfish protagonist

G1LGAMESH
G1LGAMESHLv14

Madara in avatar

Skill_Top:Can you advise me something preferable rational and selfish protagonist
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Im19
Im19Lv1

Chinese novels shall show you the way.🤗

Skill_Top:Can you advise me something preferable rational and selfish protagonist
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Odil
OdilLv14

the only one I could read without dying of cringe, or is it vomiting blood in cringe? is Reverand Insanity which is simply a masterpiece. Oh there is also WMW and Legendary Mechanic they're the only good Chinese novels I know of. So enlighten me if you know of any other ones where I wouldn't want to strangle both the mc and the dumb young master, his senior brother, his master, his uncle, his father, his sect elder, his master's uncle and his sect leader.

Im19:Chinese novels shall show you the way.🤗
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Im19
Im19Lv1

There is not really many modern chinese novels that are good enough for me to recomend except "nano machine"(I know other chinese novels that are better than the one that I recomended but I forgot there names because its been a long time), if you really want to read chinese novels go read the classics like "Journey to the west".

Odil:the only one I could read without dying of cringe, or is it vomiting blood in cringe? is Reverand Insanity which is simply a masterpiece. Oh there is also WMW and Legendary Mechanic they're the only good Chinese novels I know of. So enlighten me if you know of any other ones where I wouldn't want to strangle both the mc and the dumb young master, his senior brother, his master, his uncle, his father, his sect elder, his master's uncle and his sect leader.
Im19
Im19Lv1

I should really need to note things😆my 2 years of hunting for gold and diamond chinese novels was wasted😢 A wait my memory is restoring a bit "return of the mount hua sect" yes!! A little bit more anddd "knowing the will of the heavens, the father is unrivaled" it also has a manhua version named "peerless dad" I think thats it man, im already at my limit😅

Im19:There is not really many modern chinese novels that are good enough for me to recomend except "nano machine"(I know other chinese novels that are better than the one that I recomended but I forgot there names because its been a long time), if you really want to read chinese novels go read the classics like "Journey to the west".
Im19
Im19Lv1

Also "return of the mount hua sect" has a manhua version named "return of the blossoming sect" the art style is so good and the translation is top notch, if you want to read a manhua this is the one or cultivator against hero society, if you want commedy(wow my memories are coming back to me •́⁠ ⁠ ⁠‿⁠ ⁠,⁠•̀)

Im19:I should really need to note things😆my 2 years of hunting for gold and diamond chinese novels was wasted😢 A wait my memory is restoring a bit "return of the mount hua sect" yes!! A little bit more anddd "knowing the will of the heavens, the father is unrivaled" it also has a manhua version named "peerless dad" I think thats it man, im already at my limit😅
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FluxleX
FluxleXLv4

no you got it wrong, chinese novel mc are extreme nationalist and even if they become strong enough to destroy universe but listen to the orders of "higher ups" of china

Im19:Chinese novels shall show you the way.🤗
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