Shame you have stopped writing this, gave me RI vibes. Great read! The only negative, that I can think of, is the lack of detail between time skips. I really enjoy reading a more detailed story and this one lacks detail. Not once (up to chapter 10) did we read about anything menial. I would have loved to read more about the MC's daily routine. Food, inn room, checking the local stores, baths, ext. Again while those aren't important, the reader knows they're are happening and by writing it, it gives life to the story. From my experience, experienced writers will use fillers. These minor tasks that living people do, in my opinion, are great fillers that while not a necessity,(as you've shown) they give a realism that I believe is great addition. Heck, sometimes writers do such a well job of explaining the food the MC is eating that it will make you drool in real life. Thank you.
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