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Zwelton
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2022-05-08 08:09

Im enjoying it thus far.I think some of this story has RI inspiration but its not overdone. _---------------------------------------------------------_

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Final Score: 3.6 (Good, But Needs Improvement) DISCLAIMERS: The rating given is my own opinion of the novel at this time. And may be subject to change later. The rating given is relative to the material on this site. Meaning a 4 or 5 given on Webnovel is not a 4 or 5 given on Amazon. ----------------------------- "A Story With Potential" Pay attention to this line, as it will be the focus of my review. There is no doubt that a compelling story of an evil protagonist is at the heart of this novel. 1. No romance? Check 2. Benefit Oriented MC? Check 3. Disregards Morality? Check 4. Decent Grammar? Check (This is required for any worthwhile story) 5. Excellent Release Rate? Check 6.MC Is Not A Waste? Check So, most enjoyers of the "evil MC's" genre will enjoy this story, and give this novel 5 stars. I will not give it this luxury. Despite its excellent qualities, this story has some flaws. It is my firm belief that this story will become one of the exemplars of this genre if the author resolves these flaws. 1. There are no meaningful conflicts that the MC has to overcome. What do I mean by this? After all, the MC fights and kills others for power, is in a war situation, and his ranks quickly grow. These things are all conflicts and should satisfy readers. However there is one thing that all these conflicts miss. There is no conflict in this story that forces the MC to struggle and prove his worth to the readers. There are no conflicts, which proves the worth of the MC's character and shows us what makes him so special. There are no conflicts in this story that makes the readers say "Deon is exemplary". All conflicts in this story serve no meaningful purpose. Seeing a MC trump the average person isn't interesting. Seeing him win battles isn't impactful. And Seeing him gain strength isn't as enjoyable as it could be. Basically there are no events that occur in this story that prove the worth of the protagonist's character. 2. Readers feel no meaningful connection to the protagonist. In normal stories the MC has righteous character traits that most people find admirable and can easily relate to. Evil protagonists stories do not have this luxury. The MC's are not exemplars of morality and sacrifice others for their own benefits. There are less things that readers can relate to, meaning it's more difficult for readers to form a bond with an evil MC. However, it doesn't mean it can't be done. The authors of this niche genre must take action early in order to foster that bond more easily. Ways to do this are providing the readers with the MC's thoughts, emotions, reactions and opinions on various things that happen through out his journey. Great evil MC's are usually philosophical. They provide the readers with a genuine understanding of the MC's thought processes and why he chooses to do an action. Evil MC's must prove why their philosophy or way of thinking is the most effective. The readers must have some way to feel a connection to a character they would never want to encounter in real life. Ultimately the goal is to foster an understanding between the reader and the protagonist. ----------------------- Minor suggestions: More dialogue would help (although finding the right balance may prove difficult). ----------------------------- Despite everything I said earlier. I still like this novel. I enjoy reading about Deon, and I still want to know more about the world he's placed in. If I thought this story wasn't worth reading, I wouldn't have done such a long review. Always improve and keep up the good work author!

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