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Ashwatthama
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2022-06-02 17:45

It's good so far. Don't drop it. I hope there to be no romance and mc to be cold and cruel, and evil if possible, throughout the novel. i want him to seek only profit and never change his style. I hate if author suddenly change the style of the whole novel. But this one looks good, so far. Let's see if this seedling can grow into something wonderful or this is another fall. But so far, good. Keep up the good work and don't drop. -Thx.

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You have a great taste

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