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2022-07-14 18:41

It’ a beautifully written book and I am extremel fond of it since it shares a little of its power systems and such with one of my favourite books “reverend insanity” excluding its similarity to RI the book itself has a lot of potential and it is it’s own piece and I am truly excited to see where it goes since I have been reading the book when it had only 8 chapters or so

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