Author, I'm going to be totally honest in this review (Until Chapter 30). About the story: It's interesting. The classic back in time with valuable information, added to the VR theme. How did the protagonist go back in time? I have no idea. There wasn't any hint that he had a title, item, or anything like that that made it possible. I don't know if there will be an explanation in the future. There is little (almost no information) about the events of the world and how everything got to the point where humanity is. All I know is what's in the synopsis. There was no detailed explanation while reading. For me this hinders the immersion in the work. The VR world is very interesting, seemingly gigantic, with the potential to be really captivating when more elements are inserted into the story. Apparently Jake won't be a nice protagonist who will forgive people who want to make his life difficult. I believe he will be ruthless with enemies and I believe he will take good care of those he cares about. Now I'm going to talk about the problems... I'm going to start by talking about the problem that has irritated me the most so far. 1st Character details: The author has a big problem in this area. When I read I feel that all people are walking mannequins. I don't know what the protagonist family looks like! This is serious. When an attendant appears "A pretty attendant". When Jake meets the Queen, the most beautiful woman in the kingdom, "Jake turned to see a perfect woman". When he meets Myriad Arrow, a important character "Tall over six feet, but with a slender and athletic build"... Bro, the eyes, the skin, the face... I want details. What color is the hair? Is it long or short hair? Straight or curly hair? Details! At least for the important characters in the story. Wait... What does the protagonist look like?! 2nd short chapters: That's my opinion. I believe the chapters need to be between 25~50% longer. Reading ends very quickly. It will also be good to enrich the story with details, interactions and thoughts from the protagonist and secondary characters when necessary. 3rd Depth of the protagonist's relationship with important people: I found the mc's interaction with his family very shallow. I don't know what they're thinking, what they're feeling, what they like and don't like, what they think of Jake, what Jake thinks of them... I hope the mc's interactions with his family improve and that Jake can have a good relationship with future important characters. I hope you can consider this review and I hope it has helped you in some way to improve your story. Keep up the good work.
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Thank you for saving me. I hate the story about not giving about characters look and only said pretty or beautiful plus not explaining the looks of main character and yes your right as I read at your comments it's indeed like a mannequin even though I didn't read it.
thanks man for your review
