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Skyriano
SkyrianoLv52yr
2022-06-17 12:33

The story is not bad, I'm on chapter 14 and I still can't understand several things. For example, he is in an academy protected by a great mutant, but some policemen with a robot decide to attack them, I don't understand the thought of trying to defeat such a powerful mutant with policemen. Second, apparently it's normal to kill each other at school, I don't know if it's a satire of the United States or what. Third, a student is able to infiltrate an intelligent humanoid beast capable of murdering students, let's remember that we are in a school with powerful mutants. Fourth, upon "dying" he wakes up in a Battle Royale, and apparently an administrator tries to kill him for no reason, which is then turned into an MMORPG-like game. And that I'm only going for chapter 14. I think the story has potential, but it needs to correct several things.

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DMC_MAX
DMC_MAXAuthor

First of all- just because you're a powerful mutant doesn't mean you're immune to firearms Second- They're not normal police officers but elites specially trained to hunt down elites Third- This is the apocalypse, it's normal for mutants to kill each other since no rules apply here Fourth- I'd give you a spoiler by telling you it wasn't a student that sneaked a monster into the school Fifth- If there's one thing gods in this book enjoy is toying with lives Your review was nice though, and that's why I liked it. The reason I gave a reply is because you seem reasonable, and I wouldn't want people misunderstanding my book. [img=recommend]

Saltyfig
SaltyfigLv11

hmm interesting how easy you can explain this but none of that is in the actual story. Wonder why its confusing af🤔

DMC_MAX:First of all- just because you're a powerful mutant doesn't mean you're immune to firearms Second- They're not normal police officers but elites specially trained to hunt down elites Third- This is the apocalypse, it's normal for mutants to kill each other since no rules apply here Fourth- I'd give you a spoiler by telling you it wasn't a student that sneaked a monster into the school Fifth- If there's one thing gods in this book enjoy is toying with lives Your review was nice though, and that's why I liked it. The reason I gave a reply is because you seem reasonable, and I wouldn't want people misunderstanding my book. [img=recommend]
DMC_MAX
DMC_MAXAuthor

Because it requires common sense to piece it together

Saltyfig:hmm interesting how easy you can explain this but none of that is in the actual story. Wonder why its confusing af🤔
Saltyfig
SaltyfigLv11

Haha sure bud. This "story" is all over the place, you need a lot more than common sense to piece this disaster together. Huge lack of info in this dumpster fire

DMC_MAX:Because it requires common sense to piece it together
Dao_Of_Sauce
Dao_Of_SauceLv14

Common sense you don’t seem to have apparently. You’re basically the only one who can understand this story while the readers struggle to understand basically everything. Hopefully you’ll learn from your mistakes if you ever make a new novel.

DMC_MAX:Because it requires common sense to piece it together
DMC_MAX
DMC_MAXAuthor

Hah, if I can understand... Why can't you? I can't waste my time with you

Dao_Of_Sauce:Common sense you don’t seem to have apparently. You’re basically the only one who can understand this story while the readers struggle to understand basically everything. Hopefully you’ll learn from your mistakes if you ever make a new novel.
Dao_Of_Sauce
Dao_Of_SauceLv14

The reason it’s so easy for you to understand is because your the author. I didn’t think that would be too hard for you to figure out. Since you’re the one writing the story, even if it doesn’t make any sense to the readers, it’ll make sense to you because it’s your ideas your putting onto text.

DMC_MAX:Hah, if I can understand... Why can't you? I can't waste my time with you
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Vanaxity
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