Good novel, great story telling. Though seems a bit generic, it still got me hooked. The writing needs a bit of improvement but overall, good job. I wish you luck, author :)

Hey bro, remember me? Anyway, this is a genuine review. I have read a few chapters I am in 5 or 6 but I want to read more. Really! I am not lying! This is good! However... It's not great. Yeah... its not a novel that will come in no.1. So, you have to work hard. But I must say this novel is wayy better than mine. You write better than me.. Just keep writing.. Don't Give Up. Pleaseee! I HIGHLY RECOMMEND THIS NOVEL TO ALL OF YOU. I am jealous of you. You write so well. You write wayyyy better than me. There wasn't any long and boring info dumps like my novel. The MC seems genuine and well written. Still, you can never become too good. So I will give you some tips that might help you : 1. Read top novels in WebNovel (top 5) 2. Read real best selling novels like Sherlock Holmes and Harry Potter. (You can find their EPUB version online for free.) 3. Watch videos about how to show not tell. (You are already good at it still it will help you.) 4. Ask the top authors about some tips too. 5. Ask urself why isn't my novel getting the popularity I want. (Popularity as in comments, reviews, votes etc.) 6. Write, just write. Simple. Write to ur fullest. Wrong, bad, poor, unreasonable still just write. Trial and error is the best way to learn. No one is judging you. Heck no one even knows ur real name. So, just write. And when u wrote a million words u will see that u have come a long way. Just imagining this will make you get goosebumps right? 7. Believe in urself. 8. Love ur work if u don't, no one will. 9. I don't have anymore tips as I am also a newbie. Life isn't easy. Just keep pushing and u will win. Ur novel is good and good things can't remain unhidden. I believe in you. U can do it. And even if ur novel didn't do well u can always write another. U r not Shakespeare, right! No one even knows ur real name. So, just believe in ur self and push through. I HIGHLY RECOMMEND THIS NOVEL TO ALL OF YOU.

It’s not bad but I wouldn’t say it was good either,im on chapter 70 and one thing that sucks is that the author keeps wasting chapters on the family saying the same thing, they all act cringy/overboard when they never met the kid regardless if it’s family. Another thing is that the author must like writing beta male characters including the mc because every male character basically jusy gets dominated by their counter part with no struggle. The mom is literally trying to restrict the mcs potential without even caring and using the excuse of his safety, she doesnt even ask the opinion of the dad or trust him with the kid. The dad just gets completely dominated, whatever his mom says he does and literally he never questions it😅 She punishes them for having fun while training, regardless if she’s his mother or not, shes way overboard and unrealistic🫠Story has potential but side characters emotions feel unnatural, mc has no growth so far. I’m gonna keep reading and hope it gets better though🫡

I loved the story but there are too much of sentiments as it started to become cringey when the sentiment lines are coming up. Author, I get it that you want to show family love and all but please reduce some of family sentiments. I am not asking you to get rid of the sentiments from the story but just reduce some please.

After 100 chapters novel become very stupid, author is greedy and he's trying to put a lot of stupid things maybe maybe the novel will be longer stupid author stupid author stupid author stupid author stupid author stupid author

Overall the story wasn't bad however the whole story line has so many sentimental nonsense going on making it so cringeee that it makes me sick, the story was also too generic however it was still a bit balanced at some point so it's still fine I guess....but the whole romance of the story feels like it was written by some old virgin ...*no offense author peacee xD* I just didn't like the whole ‘sort of’ love at first sight related stuff..

man i know it's slice of life but you exaggerated every moment it becomes boring and sometimes annoying so lessen it a little bit and keep it a little fast paced

you are over exaggerate every chapter with more useless and radiant expressions to express their surroundings and making it lengthy unnecessarily it will get boring to read if you go with same pace.

This novel story is very similar to beginning after the end

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