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Perman_Attack
Perman_AttackLv42yr
2022-08-27 08:43

I loved the story but there are too much of sentiments as it started to become cringey when the sentiment lines are coming up. Author, I get it that you want to show family love and all but please reduce some of family sentiments. I am not asking you to get rid of the sentiments from the story but just reduce some please.

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DaoistConcord
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You're right, it's okay to worry about them but it's too much

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