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Perman_Attack
Perman_AttackLv42yr
2022-08-27 08:43

I loved the story but there are too much of sentiments as it started to become cringey when the sentiment lines are coming up. Author, I get it that you want to show family love and all but please reduce some of family sentiments. I am not asking you to get rid of the sentiments from the story but just reduce some please.

Isekai Journey Of The Magic Archer

H2Oz_Anxious
4.1
1122 Chs

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DaoistConcord
DaoistConcordLv2

You're right, it's okay to worry about them but it's too much

2yr
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_Himari_Nora_
_Himari_Nora_Lv1

This book is a MUST READ for everyone. Let's take a close look: 1. After reading even three chapters you gets FULL understanding of the world, leveling up and how the magic works in this world. You don't have any questions as everything is clear and everything is left is to read further. 2. The world itself is very clear, so it means author made detailed image of it in his or hers head and understand what to wrote about. 3. The main hero is a genius, but he's not over-gifted and everything is balanced. I like how you do write and describe things, but I noticed some mistakes, and I advice you to install any app that corrects grammar and here you go! This story has a great potential so I added it to my list and will read further!

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SocialHippo
SocialHippoLv14

Good novel, great story telling. Though seems a bit generic, it still got me hooked. The writing needs a bit of improvement but overall, good job. I wish you luck, author :)

2yr
KhyaaL
KhyaaLLv14

Hey bro, remember me? Anyway, this is a genuine review. I have read a few chapters I am in 5 or 6 but I want to read more. Really! I am not lying! This is good! However... It's not great. Yeah... its not a novel that will come in no.1. So, you have to work hard. But I must say this novel is wayy better than mine. You write better than me.. Just keep writing.. Don't Give Up. Pleaseee! I HIGHLY RECOMMEND THIS NOVEL TO ALL OF YOU. I am jealous of you. You write so well. You write wayyyy better than me. There wasn't any long and boring info dumps like my novel. The MC seems genuine and well written. Still, you can never become too good. So I will give you some tips that might help you : 1. Read top novels in WebNovel (top 5) 2. Read real best selling novels like Sherlock Holmes and Harry Potter. (You can find their EPUB version online for free.) 3. Watch videos about how to show not tell. (You are already good at it still it will help you.) 4. Ask the top authors about some tips too. 5. Ask urself why isn't my novel getting the popularity I want. (Popularity as in comments, reviews, votes etc.) 6. Write, just write. Simple. Write to ur fullest. Wrong, bad, poor, unreasonable still just write. Trial and error is the best way to learn. No one is judging you. Heck no one even knows ur real name. So, just write. And when u wrote a million words u will see that u have come a long way. Just imagining this will make you get goosebumps right? 7. Believe in urself. 8. Love ur work if u don't, no one will. 9. I don't have anymore tips as I am also a newbie. Life isn't easy. Just keep pushing and u will win. Ur novel is good and good things can't remain unhidden. I believe in you. U can do it. And even if ur novel didn't do well u can always write another. U r not Shakespeare, right! No one even knows ur real name. So, just believe in ur self and push through. I HIGHLY RECOMMEND THIS NOVEL TO ALL OF YOU.

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Luxuriant
LuxuriantLv4

It’s not bad but I wouldn’t say it was good either,im on chapter 70 and one thing that sucks is that the author keeps wasting chapters on the family saying the same thing, they all act cringy/overboard when they never met the kid regardless if it’s family. Another thing is that the author must like writing beta male characters including the mc because every male character basically jusy gets dominated by their counter part with no struggle. The mom is literally trying to restrict the mcs potential without even caring and using the excuse of his safety, she doesnt even ask the opinion of the dad or trust him with the kid. The dad just gets completely dominated, whatever his mom says he does and literally he never questions it😅 She punishes them for having fun while training, regardless if she’s his mother or not, shes way overboard and unrealistic🫠Story has potential but side characters emotions feel unnatural, mc has no growth so far. I’m gonna keep reading and hope it gets better though🫡

2yr
xYunchex
xYunchexLv13

After 100 chapters novel become very stupid, author is greedy and he's trying to put a lot of stupid things maybe maybe the novel will be longer stupid author stupid author stupid author stupid author stupid author stupid author

2yr
Ezra_Kiel
Ezra_KielLv4

Overall the story wasn't bad however the whole story line has so many sentimental nonsense going on making it so cringeee that it makes me sick, the story was also too generic however it was still a bit balanced at some point so it's still fine I guess....but the whole romance of the story feels like it was written by some old virgin ...*no offense author peacee xD* I just didn't like the whole ‘sort of’ love at first sight related stuff..

2yr
_02_Jaiprakashp
_02_JaiprakashpLv14

man i know it's slice of life but you exaggerated every moment it becomes boring and sometimes annoying so lessen it a little bit and keep it a little fast paced

2yr
_02_Jaiprakashp
_02_JaiprakashpLv14

you are over exaggerate every chapter with more useless and radiant expressions to express their surroundings and making it lengthy unnecessarily it will get boring to read if you go with same pace.

1yr
master_patel
master_patelLv11

This novel story is very similar to beginning after the end

2yr
UmbraHaven
UmbraHavenLv15

Reveal spoiler

2yr
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