Fixed. 🙂‍↕️

Genuinely appreciate the review.❤️

I understand the easy fix part, but it’s about more than just not having readers. Even I know this novel has a lot of potential, that’s mostly the main reason I’m afraid that I’ll ruin it beyond just having grammatical mistakes. Writing multiple novels at a time isn’t really a problem either. My first one was and is still something I cherish immensely, same with my other novels. And I’ve chosen to focus on one many times as well. When I started this novel, I was focusing on this one, while when I started my latest one, I was focusing on that one. I can do all of them together, but it would make the time I can give each of them significantly less. Well… A lot of it is just excuses, but I will look into the grammar. The circumstances prevents me from doing a lot that I can, but explaining myself will not really matter much. I can only hope you continue, but it is really up to you. I’ll do what I can now… (Thanks for reading. And these words.)

…I know I’m losing a lot, and I want to work on it as well. I should stop making excuses. I’ll start today. Let’s see how far I can go this time. (Thanks for reading...)

Genuinely, effect of writing multiple novels. (Am not changing many things at this point, I have to start writing this one first.)

I know that… and I’ll try correcting what I can, but the main problem with me regarding this particular issue is the time I can allocate to this work. It’s not even about the language but the time I can give to the work because of all the other things going on with me. I can make it so that there’s no error or any typo in the entire chapter but because of the lack of time and motivation to spend more effort on a work that is being read not by many people, I do not go for it. I know it’s sometimes, most of the times unbearable. But unless I get a response from the readers like this, I don’t go for correcting all the things. (I understand it’s too much sometimes, and I’m to blame for that. I accept it, I kill a lot of my potential readers. But there’s little I want to do given the circumstances.) I’ll try to correct a few chapters after this one but I might not be able to do a lot, so I apologize in advance. (Thanks for reading…)

Neither 🙃

The author doesn’t beat around the bush and knows exactly what they are doing. I had fun reading this work as well, and I can tell the author is an experienced writer… I’m looking forward to what they present in the future.

🥲 In the future perhaps.

lol nitro where

And yet you write better than me. 🙂

The story seems good and from the looks of it, the writer has a great way with words. They are learning how to work with perspective but they should soon find their equilibrium with them. The pacing and balance is not perfect but it is not so much that it affects anything. Overall, it’s a great experience with a progression structure where the MC also has experience of his past.

Why’s even interested in anything at all?

It could use some work… 🥲 Like, it’s not that it’s boring, it’s meaningless. There’s no point here, not even the there’s-no-point-to-this point that you tried to make.

‘It’s not like I would ever spare these hideous beasts.’

Using He after calling it an It isn’t appropriate 😃

See, just like how you can’t show this in a FPP, you unconsciously know the whole interaction doesn’t have to be from his perspective.

By just changing the whole interaction into TPP, you can make it so much more impactful, you know? FPP is not really needed here. Try reading it back again yourself.