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FushiiLv12yr
2022-04-19 18:21

It has a bumpy start but after the time skip it starts to get good. The writing quality is okay for a fanfic. There are a lot of changes in the story which makes it hard to follow but the author fixes most of them in the later chapters. The conversations between the characters are a bit to short. But they are generally good. I would recommend giving this a read. Fixes you can do: Grammer checking before publishing (use commas and capital letters). Try to put yourself in the mc's shoes which is Madara and what he would do. Make the chapters a little bit longer they are ending to fast, you can make them longer. Describe their surrounding so the reader can understand better where they are, this will also make the chapter longer. Don't switch perspective to much as it can get a bit confusing for the reader.

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Master_CheifAuthor

thanks I'll try my best the review really helps me improve

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Who are the harem members?

Master_Cheif:thanks I'll try my best the review really helps me improve
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ur mum!

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