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Abs_playezLv12yr
2022-05-19 16:57

It has potential if I had to say so. There are a lot of problems in this though as stated :- 1.The sentences are readable like you will understand what the mc is trying to say but there could be alot of improvement on some obvious mistakes. 2.Author in the beginning keeps changing his mind and keeps adding stuff in while something is happening. If I had to give a tip to the author is just have a general plan on what you are going to do with the story, like have a solid plan you can revolve around. 3.Story development wise it's decent like I can see what the authors trying to get to but not taking the right steps. 4. World back ground is what do I say it's marvel.... and character design is well Madara is Madara.... The plus point is as stated :- 1.The story is new so it's still changeable. 2.idk why but for me this feels kinda refreshing 3. I like the idea of where the author is trying to get to but not sure if he will get to them. 4. It's not cringy. 5. It has potential Things to improve from my pov 1 Get a editor or just learn basic English. 2.Don't just change the story whenever you like. It might not be effecting the novel now but it will if you do it later. 3.Post more like once or twice a week.

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Master_CheifAuthor

thank you for the tips and honesty I know I change alot in the middle but I'm coming up with a plan so it wont happen often. I'll try to make it more better.👍

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