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HopeBones5
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2022-05-11 02:11

overall story felt very flat with with the extras they just didnt hook mr into reading it and eventually made it so that all character interactions outside of Luna felt dull and uninspired why have an HP story if you aren't going to flesh out any of the side characters?

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Emanuel_Alegre
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Until which part did you read?

HopeBones5
HopeBones5Lv15

I read just past chapter 20 ish, it just felt very dull to me overall not necessarily Mary Sue but felt lifeless.

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FinnsRevenge
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I only read up to the part where MC sits in Hermione's cabin on the train but thats as far as I needed. The MC has the emotional range of a brick if he isn't talking to what I'm going to assume are future harem members(Luna, Ginny, Hermione so far) After checking the Harem Quiz and saw a unicorn was a viable and voted for option I decided against further reading. You might be thinking "Red Weasley" is a kind of nickname or epitaph but it isn't. The MC threw a huge fit over his name "Nicholas Leopold Weasley" and wanted something edgy and unique and after a long process had his name legally and magically changed to Red. His three wishes were unique and interesting and I rather enjoyed the aura/essence and the mini skills as a pseudo-gamer ability without levels and stats but the blood magic apparently changed MC enough that he has hair the color of wet blood, and red eyes. Naturally such a character should have the name Red. If I could give less than 1 star for character design I absolutely would. Some good parts of the story, so you and others don't feel like there was nothing good, were the merchant. I liked the idea of it and how it was handled with getting stock to where the sold products were sent. Luna being Luna and being able to pry some emotions out of the brick was fitting and their interactions with her parents was nice. Author I get you had your own reasons for wanting his name to be Red but I feel like it could have been handled better in the story than just spazzing out over it like he did.

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