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Franklin_Nwakamma
Franklin_NwakammaAuthor2yr
2022-10-13 01:44

Shameless author review here. This is first time writing a sports novel so don't expect this to be a super novel although I am a super football fan so I am sure of what I am doing. My grammar isn't great but I'm pretty sure it's readable and I try my best to minimise errors. Drop any questions you need answers to馃グ

My Goalkeeping System

Franklin_Nwakamma
4.1
544 Chs

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TrackShadow
TrackShadowLv4

some suggestions 1. moderate pace 2. shows his personal life too 3. dont go into romance until the mid of the novel. 4. it would be better if it is in the real world 5. set some challenges from the system r real life where he loses 6. rise in confidence with character buildup

2yr
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Franklin_Nwakamma
Franklin_NwakammaAuthor

Thanks for the suggestions, I'll try my best.

TrackShadow:some suggestions 1. moderate pace 2. shows his personal life too 3. dont go into romance until the mid of the novel. 4. it would be better if it is in the real world 5. set some challenges from the system r real life where he loses 6. rise in confidence with character buildup
2yr
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TrackShadow
TrackShadowLv4

these are just some suggestions. do your own thing brother. follow your own inspiration. hope for the best

2yr
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Franklin_Nwakamma
Franklin_NwakammaAuthor

Okay.

TrackShadow:these are just some suggestions. do your own thing brother. follow your own inspiration. hope for the best
2yr
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Shadow_Gamer1
Shadow_Gamer1Lv4

auther,is that what happened to you?my condolences to your team

2yr
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CSManga
CSMangaLv13

Heavens!馃槀馃槀馃槀

Shadow_Gamer1:auther,is that what happened to you?my condolences to your team
2yr
samuel_A
samuel_ALv4

From the sypnosis, is that all the MC is gonna be? Just a pro? Not a legend or the best goal keeper the world had ever seen? If he鈥檚 just gonna be a pro then please let me know. I鈥檓 not here to see someone become regular like the rest of world but to see someone conquer it and leave a mark. So please tell me, it would save a lot of my time.

2yr
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Franklin_Nwakamma
Franklin_NwakammaAuthor

Pro is just the base, he's going to be great but I don't think you'll like the way he began.

samuel_A:From the sypnosis, is that all the MC is gonna be? Just a pro? Not a legend or the best goal keeper the world had ever seen? If he鈥檚 just gonna be a pro then please let me know. I鈥檓 not here to see someone become regular like the rest of world but to see someone conquer it and leave a mark. So please tell me, it would save a lot of my time.
2yr
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samuel_A
samuel_ALv4

I see. I鈥檒l read a few chapters and decide from there.

Franklin_Nwakamma:Pro is just the base, he's going to be great but I don't think you'll like the way he began.
2yr
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mystic_dark_100
mystic_dark_100Lv14

who cares brother the fact you brought out a story this good shows how much you put into it [img=recommend], from one Nigerian to another I respect u no cap

2yr
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Franklin_Nwakamma
Franklin_NwakammaAuthor

Thanks, you're Nigerian too?

mystic_dark_100:who cares brother the fact you brought out a story this good shows how much you put into it [img=recommend], from one Nigerian to another I respect u no cap
2yr
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mystic_dark_100
mystic_dark_100Lv14

Yes I am, an edo boy for that matter, mystic dark is just my pen name

Franklin_Nwakamma:Thanks, you're Nigerian too?
2yr
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Franklin_Nwakamma
Franklin_NwakammaAuthor

Okay, I'm from IMO

mystic_dark_100:Yes I am, an edo boy for that matter, mystic dark is just my pen name
2yr
QuaziY
QuaziYLv4

Dave is like a lazy rich spoiled brat. He has no talent, doesn't train, complain about everything etc. System is like trying hard to make him a footballer (Goalkeeper).

2yr
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Franklin_Nwakamma
Franklin_NwakammaAuthor

In the early chapters yeah, but he's really improved in the current chapters

QuaziY:Dave is like a lazy rich spoiled brat. He has no talent, doesn't train, complain about everything etc. System is like trying hard to make him a footballer (Goalkeeper).
2yr
Zenick
ZenickLv4

who ask you?馃檮馃檮

Franklin_Nwakamma:Okay, I'm from IMO
2yr
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Franklin_Nwakamma
Franklin_NwakammaAuthor

what're you doing here馃敧馃憖

Zenick:who ask you?馃檮馃檮
2yr
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Zenick
ZenickLv4

Just checking, sorry bro. Don't stab me please馃檹馃檹

Franklin_Nwakamma:what're you doing here馃敧馃憖
2yr
RyuSenju
RyuSenjuLv13

Dave is annoying and stupid and doesn't listen when the system is trying to help him. I swear if you plan on doing another sports novel, please do a smarter person who wants to be the best. Dave is not him it's best to kill him off he just pathetic trash no matter who tries to help him.

Franklin_Nwakamma:In the early chapters yeah, but he's really improved in the current chapters
2yr
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Franklin_Nwakamma
Franklin_NwakammaAuthor

I know, I learnt a lot from this one given that it's my sports novel so the next one will be better but, if you continue, it gets better down the line.

RyuSenju:Dave is annoying and stupid and doesn't listen when the system is trying to help him. I swear if you plan on doing another sports novel, please do a smarter person who wants to be the best. Dave is not him it's best to kill him off he just pathetic trash no matter who tries to help him.
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2yr
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Loneee_3
Loneee_3Lv4

i never thought of writing a review here nor did give one before but this novel deserves one. first of all the novel is amazing it refreshing to read. it's not like other novel where the MC would get skills and be super strong, here it's a bit different it's neither a OP one nor a sloppy one, it's the best for that situation. And the other thing i liked in this novel was romance even tho it's not much but i like those sweet moments. Even tho there are few bugs coming in between their relationship both MC and FMC are swatting those bugs away and i do hope that author won't make any changes to their relationship especially cheating, NTR, etc it would be worst. i think that's it. Thanks for the novel and hope u keep up the good work馃憤馃憤

2yr

Franklin_Nwakamma
Franklin_NwakammaAuthor

Hello, everyone, it's the author here to drop an appreciation review after reaching 300 chapters, the novel didn't start out well but I'm doing my best to tie up all loose ends and I hope you guys are seeing it get better, a big thank you to everyone for all your support, that's the main thing that keeps me going.

2yr
ADHD_Guy74
ADHD_Guy74Lv4

Too much unnecessary drama and lack of drive. I just want to read a football fic man, not some sappy romance :')

2yr
ijxnakmal
ijxnakmalLv5

Goalkeeper system or watching football system? read until chapter 14 and drop because author keep writing about MC watching football game only.

2yr
LinhMieu
LinhMieuLv4

Sorry but dropping it early. The novel has a lot of fillers and it feels like the author is underestimating soccer players too much or the mc is just trash. First, the task given is 2km running, drink 2 litters, Spend 2 hours in the gym. The mc [author] created a loophole and not realizing it, just run 2km in the gym and gets double reward but nope. Also, a soccer player can run around 6 to 8.5 miles per game or 9.7km to 13km. I understand that the mc is a goalkeeper but 2km is ridiculously low for the mc to whine about how hard it is. Btw, I understand that the latter chapters may be better but not all reader willing to go through almost 20+ chapters of mediocre writing to get there. Anyway good luck.

2yr
StoneBreaker97
StoneBreaker97Lv14

A bit of a missed opportunity with the is one. Read 30 chapters, way too little progress and way too much time spent with the gf.

2yr
Mister_Robot
Mister_RobotLv4

The mc has the personality of a cardboard. The story remains stagnant on the MC and his love interest's romance. One of the worst sports novel in webnovel. wouldn't recommend it to anybody

1yr
CarsonRome_432
CarsonRome_432Lv3

Not bad, although I feel like its lacking a bit in the action part. Its really good though for someone who likes the soccer genre. Update faster and I'll drop Powerstones everyday

2yr
BryndenRivers
BryndenRiversLv13

Annoying snarky system, an MC with absolutely no drive willpower or self confidence, seriously slow leveling up, and constant failed missions. Honestly I'm only still reading it because some people say it gets better, but the MC is pathetic if he is this lazy and still expects to succeed in pro football. I just don't see the appeal in reading about a loser failing challenges even when he has a cheat like system. The romance is ok but feels pretty flat as well. All in all, I'd say read it if you are really wanting a sports novel. Skip it if you want to read a novel with an MC worthy of his system.

1yr
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