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Franklin_NwakammaAuthor2yr
2022-10-12 17:44

Shameless author review here. This is first time writing a sports novel so don't expect this to be a super novel although I am a super football fan so I am sure of what I am doing. My grammar isn't great but I'm pretty sure it's readable and I try my best to minimise errors. Drop any questions you need answers to🥰

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TrackShadowLv4

some suggestions 1. moderate pace 2. shows his personal life too 3. dont go into romance until the mid of the novel. 4. it would be better if it is in the real world 5. set some challenges from the system r real life where he loses 6. rise in confidence with character buildup

Franklin_NwakammaAuthor

Thanks for the suggestions, I'll try my best.

TrackShadow:some suggestions 1. moderate pace 2. shows his personal life too 3. dont go into romance until the mid of the novel. 4. it would be better if it is in the real world 5. set some challenges from the system r real life where he loses 6. rise in confidence with character buildup
TrackShadowLv4

these are just some suggestions. do your own thing brother. follow your own inspiration. hope for the best

Franklin_NwakammaAuthor

Okay.

TrackShadow:these are just some suggestions. do your own thing brother. follow your own inspiration. hope for the best
Shadow_Gamer1Lv4

auther,is that what happened to you?my condolences to your team

CSMangaLv13

Heavens!😂😂😂

Shadow_Gamer1:auther,is that what happened to you?my condolences to your team
samuel_ALv4

From the sypnosis, is that all the MC is gonna be? Just a pro? Not a legend or the best goal keeper the world had ever seen? If he’s just gonna be a pro then please let me know. I’m not here to see someone become regular like the rest of world but to see someone conquer it and leave a mark. So please tell me, it would save a lot of my time.

Franklin_NwakammaAuthor

Pro is just the base, he's going to be great but I don't think you'll like the way he began.

samuel_A:From the sypnosis, is that all the MC is gonna be? Just a pro? Not a legend or the best goal keeper the world had ever seen? If he’s just gonna be a pro then please let me know. I’m not here to see someone become regular like the rest of world but to see someone conquer it and leave a mark. So please tell me, it would save a lot of my time.
samuel_ALv4

I see. I’ll read a few chapters and decide from there.

Franklin_Nwakamma:Pro is just the base, he's going to be great but I don't think you'll like the way he began.
mystic_dark_100Lv14

who cares brother the fact you brought out a story this good shows how much you put into it [img=recommend], from one Nigerian to another I respect u no cap

Franklin_NwakammaAuthor

Thanks, you're Nigerian too?

mystic_dark_100:who cares brother the fact you brought out a story this good shows how much you put into it [img=recommend], from one Nigerian to another I respect u no cap
mystic_dark_100Lv14

Yes I am, an edo boy for that matter, mystic dark is just my pen name

Franklin_Nwakamma:Thanks, you're Nigerian too?
Franklin_NwakammaAuthor

Okay, I'm from IMO

mystic_dark_100:Yes I am, an edo boy for that matter, mystic dark is just my pen name
QuaziYLv4

Dave is like a lazy rich spoiled brat. He has no talent, doesn't train, complain about everything etc. System is like trying hard to make him a footballer (Goalkeeper).

Franklin_NwakammaAuthor

In the early chapters yeah, but he's really improved in the current chapters

QuaziY:Dave is like a lazy rich spoiled brat. He has no talent, doesn't train, complain about everything etc. System is like trying hard to make him a footballer (Goalkeeper).
ZenickLv4

who ask you?🙄🙄

Franklin_Nwakamma:Okay, I'm from IMO
Franklin_NwakammaAuthor

what're you doing here🔪👀

Zenick:who ask you?🙄🙄
ZenickLv4

Just checking, sorry bro. Don't stab me please🙏🙏

Franklin_Nwakamma:what're you doing here🔪👀
RyuSenjuLv13

Dave is annoying and stupid and doesn't listen when the system is trying to help him. I swear if you plan on doing another sports novel, please do a smarter person who wants to be the best. Dave is not him it's best to kill him off he just pathetic trash no matter who tries to help him.

Franklin_Nwakamma:In the early chapters yeah, but he's really improved in the current chapters
Franklin_NwakammaAuthor

I know, I learnt a lot from this one given that it's my sports novel so the next one will be better but, if you continue, it gets better down the line.

RyuSenju:Dave is annoying and stupid and doesn't listen when the system is trying to help him. I swear if you plan on doing another sports novel, please do a smarter person who wants to be the best. Dave is not him it's best to kill him off he just pathetic trash no matter who tries to help him.
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