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Writing Quality: 5/5 This is one of the most decent ones in this platform in terms of writing. The structure is well thought out without much noise. Never felt too cramped. Story Development: 3.5/5(overall) 2/5(personal) Not really blaming the author as I'm in that phase where I can't really enjoy any slow paced story. And this story is as slow as it gets. Wouldn't be surprised if only the childhood arc took 50+ chapters. So, this one will be a downvote from me. Not necessarily bad but not to my taste. Character Design: 4/5 At times I felt like I gave too much of a score here but then again some characters are really fleshed out. This one is really all over the place tbh. Some characters are totally monochromatic while others are totally defined with all dynamics. Then again it's only 20 chapters so far. Could change in future. Updating Stability: As I read the whole 20 chaps in one go, I honestly am not informed well enough to comment on the updating Stability. But tbh I never really had any problem with anyone's updating schedule, so long the story remains interesting. So a 5/5 from me World Background: 4/5 While teenager me would've ranked "ASOIAF" as 10/5, unfortunately the adult me disagrees. My experience has already been soured with the catastrophe of the "Last Season" of GOT. Since there hasn't been much of a world building to this point, I'm assuming it to follow the original, Hence 4/5 Overall it's a good fanfic to pass time. One where I can guarantee that you aren't gonna lose your braincell in every second sentence or shiver with cringe with every dialogue. This is no masterpiece by any means. Not yet at least. But there isn't anything fundamentally wrong with it, aside from slow pace. But that's my personal gripe. So I'd implore everyone to give it a try at least.

There's one thing I'm just really annoyed about, story is decent. But in c50 Starks and mc plan to build port on western side of their territory, but somehow that translates to building one on freaking Bear ISLAND. I mean what? How does that help north? It's an island, it won't help with trade or any proper military action. If we assume it would be used, which it wouldn't, it it would be very expensive detour, and you still would need to make one larger port on western shores of north just so that you can use that detour to freaking transport stuff to anyone but Mormonts. Please just look at the freaking westoros map, it's island + it's just in awful position for any kind of trade or naval action. Just PLEASE fix this absurdity. I mean just imagine US building their first proper port, but instead of building it on US mainland, they build it on puerto rico :D I mean clearly this whole thing was just way by author to hook up Jon with the Mormont girl, but it was just idiotic forced plot. Think of better excuse ;D I'm willing to remove this review as long as this issue is fixed, but till then it's going to stay, it's just so stupid and beyond all logic. Otherwise story is pretty nice.

Waste of a reincarnation, very slow. I read all the chapters. Despite the minor changes it was 1 of the worst GOT fanfic I would've read why? Mc doesn't have any goals or use his knowledge in a way to affect the story. It feels like if u remove the reincarnation as the story might have progressed they seem...its like he's utilizing the knowledge.

Evaluation: Subpar. (didn't you notice? same review content, since you did the same thing here from your HPSI). WQ: With less to no mistake grammatical error, however, monotonous dialogues/interaction & redundant thought process which is just a repeat of the cannon book of ASOIFVerse. 4/5 SD: With a slow to average pace of development and it also lacks MC & story progression since author-san decided to follow cannon or just go with the flow which is lackluster. 2/5 CD: MC is a transmigrator but his foreknowledge & adult mentality are lacking. Lack of utilization of ASOIAFVerse foreknowledge & his earth/previous life experiences. Too wholesome for my tastes. The only difference MC-SI made here is to stabilize Jon Snow mental state. 2/5 Advice: Author-san, I highly recommend reading enough SI/OC/Reader Insert FF more to help you create your own writing style when it comes to creating your SI FF as I have noticed that you are just tweaking the characters SI you have chosen as well as the story to make it yours which wouldn't help you in the long run. US: the stability of the updates are good enough as author-san make sure to prioritize quality work with less mistakes over quantity. 4/5 WB: There's nothing new as author-san decided that MC follows/observe cannon. 3/5 Don't be discouraged by the reviews but take it as a challenge to do better. Kudos to author-san and well wishes! xD

This story is so slow it makes you want to rip your hair out. I'm 75 chapters in and the most significant thing that has happened was Jon making a trade deal with Olenna. The slow and pretty frequent useless chapters just make it a slog to read. The story itself is fine but it could have been told just as well in like half the time. Also, Val's presence in the story ruins it for me. She's obnoxious and doesn't listen and yet Jon still doesn't do anything cause she's pretty and related to Mance.

Warning! Although this is a great fanfic, it's a pure slice-of-life fanfic with cute moments and all that good stuff but don't read it expecting anything to happen that is plot relevant I mean none!

5 stars from me. Very interesting plot and pace is alright. I like it. I hope Jon becomes the Business Tycoon of Westeros world. Powerful and richer than everyone.

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