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TruthHurtsX1000
TruthHurtsX1000Lv21yr
2023-12-23 17:37

As of chapter 23 not alot going on. Mc just starting out with his master and doing first mission..grammar and 0verall writing is great. The negative is the mc is very lackluster and boring. Basic human and cliche af looks with blond hair and blue eyes. Even his light saber look is boring. Only thing that stands out is his light saber color. He only had mid count of 17,500 so he not really even a mc since Anakin double his count almost lol. So far mc doesn't stand out at all and seems more like a side character than story mc. Hopefully he gets better but idk

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AgentBoin
AgentBoinLv15

... so the MC isn't OP? what a shocker! 17500 is still an incredible amount. Which is close or around yoda's estimated one in legends which was the highest on record prior to Anakin for the jedi order. Mc def not protagonist material /s

theblackPhoenix
theblackPhoenixLv1

what color is his saber?

TruthHurtsX1000
TruthHurtsX1000Lv2

Gold color

theblackPhoenix:what color is his saber?
wororrin
wororrinLv1

Yeah...like, Id really like to wish the best to the characters in stories. But... But when they are initially given a choice like - “Hey, dude, choose any race from the verse.” But they pick a human... I don't know why not just pick a Celestial (if you picked from SW). To get immortality and godlike powers from start. Theris no logic to not do it, if you can...

ErozothDraeor
ErozothDraeorLv6

Thanks for the review, I will pass. No OP, then plot armor is OP. It's not like the original story is lacking in struggle, tragedy, angst and all that (especially the books), if I want all of that I will read the original. Even the tags don't exactly point to a resourceful MC with ambition, frankly, the description and tags made this seems very bland.

Eins_Mensch
Eins_MenschLv14

thats not all that special considering the temple guard have yellow doubel lightsabers

TruthHurtsX1000:Gold color
CMDR_Palps
CMDR_PalpsLv1

Temple guards often use them, however I think that's more of a regulation considering their saber style and choice of outfit. Now a regular force user with a gold saber is definitely uncommon. I think the only one like that we've seen is Ventress after her sabers were stolen by Baris Offee

Eins_Mensch:thats not all that special considering the temple guard have yellow doubel lightsabers
Protege
ProtegeLv4

There is no cure for stupid, period. 😀😀😀

wororrin:Yeah...like, Id really like to wish the best to the characters in stories. But... But when they are initially given a choice like - “Hey, dude, choose any race from the verse.” But they pick a human... I don't know why not just pick a Celestial (if you picked from SW). To get immortality and godlike powers from start. Theris no logic to not do it, if you can...
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DrOpMeOuT
DrOpMeOuTLv2

Midi-chlorians were the worst thing brought into star wars, especially when at the time legends was still canon and there were plenty of jedi before yoda much more powerful than him, but since they are there then its kinda stupid to have an MC who has less and is weaker than all the powerhouses in the galaxy, especially when said MC want's to take them all on to build his own empire? its a bullshit excuse to mask shit writing, he can't come up with convincing ways for the MC to grow in defeat so its easier to just blame it on the midi-chlorian count lol

AgentBoin:... so the MC isn't OP? what a shocker! 17500 is still an incredible amount. Which is close or around yoda's estimated one in legends which was the highest on record prior to Anakin for the jedi order. Mc def not protagonist material /s
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