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Theroxis
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2022-08-19 03:00

The script format is not doing it for me. You are going great the first time with only one perspective, but now its just a huge mess. The story and everything else is ok, but the way it's formatted is just painful

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VainKiru
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I should've believe your review not trust those 5stars

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With the lacking of amount of Honkai Impact fanfics on this website, especially good ones like the HI3: The Rise Herrscher of Shadow fanfic, this fanfic is definitely a godsend. (My standards aren't that high so you shouldn't exactly 100% trust this half-baked review) Writing Quality (5/5) - There's little to no grammar mistakes and the sentences are coherent. Plus another reviewer (DaoistrjOXfa) who uses a translator for this fanfic apparently had a relatively easy time understanding too. Update Consistency (5/5) - This fanfic based on the upload date is six days old and already has 20 chapters with a daily basis of around 1-2 chapters once Volume 2 started which is exceptional to say the least. Story/Plot (4.5/5) - The MC dies and then is sent to God where that God gives him one wish and spins a roulette that lands on the Honkai world, deciding the world he'll be going to, typical stuff so far. But the timeline he gets transported is not the current era but the Fire Moth era where characters like Eden and Elysia are genuinely alive which is unique and opens a lot of possibilities. The MC has no previous knowledge of the Honkai world and is going in blind with the only hint that the world isn't so hardcore where you literally die the second your born although still pretty dangerous. The pacing also has been going at a pace that's neither fast or slow and is keeping a steady flow. Characters (4.5/5) - Wolfgang Schneider and now known as Einheri, the MC was an 'average' doctor who cared for only doing the minimal for the most part. After being reincarnated, he's shown to be a charming person who has a outgoing personality that can easily make friends with a likeable attitude. He's also open to the idea of a harem so a instant plus for my personal preference. I don't think I should reveal the cast of characters that's part of the MC's little friend group but all you need to know is that they're likeable and will mostly likely not annoy you, all having a personality of their own. Also the harem (Well the MC only has one partner so far but it'll clearly grow, especially during the current era when it comes to that based on the author's reply to me) is not Pokemon-like but the development with the first partner seem slightly rushed imo. The development really only lasts a few chapters as its sadly skimmed over with a two year time skip in-between with off-screen development. In the end I don't really mind that much since the author is new to writing romance and most likely just wanted to progress the plot since it was starting to feel like a slice-of-life fanfic at that point but I just hope that not every romantic development will be skimmed over like that since seeing some fluffy moments with progress is nice. World Background (?/5) - Pretty early to score this so I'm leaving this on unknown but based on the 20 chapters so far, the main cast have only just moved out of their main meeting point which is the city of Nagazora so not much of the world has been explored so its definitely unfair to rate this.

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