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DRIPPINGwet
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2022-07-11 10:45

Bad. Forced drama. Author cant express what the character's emotion, I cant connect to the characters especially the mc. Just read it guys, tell me if im wrong.

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Ashtar29
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I guess it's a thing with tastes, no? I can't please everyone. Some people like my story, and other like you don't. Anyways, thanks for reading.

Alfiemooon
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That sounds nothing like taste. it just sounds like you can't properly write emotions.

Ashtar29:I guess it's a thing with tastes, no? I can't please everyone. Some people like my story, and other like you don't. Anyways, thanks for reading.
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Ashtar29
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Now, this here is where authors decide to give their stories beaming reviews but no, not I! I've decided to honestly rate my story and will give a more thorough breakdown for certain ratings down below, spoiler free of course! ;) Writing Quality: My writing quality is one of the very few things that I'm somewhat confident in—here's a bit of a side note but d'you know how hilarious it would be for me to say this and then screw up grammatically in this review? I generally look through chapters multiple times before posting but hey, I'm only human so a few errors are bound to slip through the cracks. Even then, I usually correct those within twenty-four hours of the chapter being uploaded. Stability of Updates: Unless something catastrophic happens—God forbid—then I think my update stability on Webnovel will remain constant— let's not try to jinx it though, okay? *sweats nervously* Story Development: Now here's one of the things that I've rated below five starts and my reason for doing so is very simple: I am a newbie writer. This is, what, my second story? It would be beyond presumptuous for me to claim that I am one-hundred percent confident in my story-writing skills because long story short, I am not. But, if you're willing to stick around and throw in some constructive criticism here and there, maybe I'll improve! I sure do hope so. Character Design: The final thing I've rated at five stars. I'm pretty confident in writing slice of life but I'll be frank, I am going to try to create characters with depth. This story is my attempt to make it as realistic as possible meaning every interaction, be they childish or serious; grim or fluff, will mirror how I'd act—what did you expect? This is a Self Insert, you know? Still, I understand that people have different conceptions of what they deem as 'realistic' and here's something that'll really put your knickers in a twist: who decides what counts as realistic in the first place? This is fiction! As the old Victorian adage says: beauty is in the eye of the beholder. World Background: Another thing that I am not as confident in alongside Story Development— World Background. My previous story didn't go on long enough for me to tackle the story's world and characters in depth hence my trepidation when it comes to facing this challenge. Afterthoughts: Alright, you've made it this far, would it hurt you to read a few more lines? I am looking forward to this story, honestly. It's good to get things like this out of your system and as a plus, it helps me out in two ways. The first is that it hones my writing skills and the second being that it elevates my creativity, my ability to think on the fly and whatnot. That's about it! Do feel free to reply to this comment with any thoughts of your own, what you enjoyed, what you'd like to see etc. I shall do my best to reply to any ones that spark my interest. Stay on your toes and more importantly, stay safe! Best wishes. —Ash

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