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OrangePanther
OrangePantherLv42yr
2022-04-16 09:34

Solid premise, Solid Writing. Story has *alot* of potential for development. It would be interesting to see how a Dragonborne adapts to a more modern magical time, than his own. I am looking forward to see where this goes. Good luck!

[REWRITE IS UP] The Dragonborn Comes: A Self Insert

Ashtar29
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Ashtar29
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Now, this here is where authors decide to give their stories beaming reviews but no, not I! I've decided to honestly rate my story and will give a more thorough breakdown for certain ratings down below, spoiler free of course! ;) Writing Quality: My writing quality is one of the very few things that I'm somewhat confident in—here's a bit of a side note but d'you know how hilarious it would be for me to say this and then screw up grammatically in this review? I generally look through chapters multiple times before posting but hey, I'm only human so a few errors are bound to slip through the cracks. Even then, I usually correct those within twenty-four hours of the chapter being uploaded. Stability of Updates: Unless something catastrophic happens—God forbid—then I think my update stability on Webnovel will remain constant— let's not try to jinx it though, okay? *sweats nervously* Story Development: Now here's one of the things that I've rated below five starts and my reason for doing so is very simple: I am a newbie writer. This is, what, my second story? It would be beyond presumptuous for me to claim that I am one-hundred percent confident in my story-writing skills because long story short, I am not. But, if you're willing to stick around and throw in some constructive criticism here and there, maybe I'll improve! I sure do hope so. Character Design: The final thing I've rated at five stars. I'm pretty confident in writing slice of life but I'll be frank, I am going to try to create characters with depth. This story is my attempt to make it as realistic as possible meaning every interaction, be they childish or serious; grim or fluff, will mirror how I'd act—what did you expect? This is a Self Insert, you know? Still, I understand that people have different conceptions of what they deem as 'realistic' and here's something that'll really put your knickers in a twist: who decides what counts as realistic in the first place? This is fiction! As the old Victorian adage says: beauty is in the eye of the beholder. World Background: Another thing that I am not as confident in alongside Story Development— World Background. My previous story didn't go on long enough for me to tackle the story's world and characters in depth hence my trepidation when it comes to facing this challenge. Afterthoughts: Alright, you've made it this far, would it hurt you to read a few more lines? I am looking forward to this story, honestly. It's good to get things like this out of your system and as a plus, it helps me out in two ways. The first is that it hones my writing skills and the second being that it elevates my creativity, my ability to think on the fly and whatnot. That's about it! Do feel free to reply to this comment with any thoughts of your own, what you enjoyed, what you'd like to see etc. I shall do my best to reply to any ones that spark my interest. Stay on your toes and more importantly, stay safe! Best wishes. —Ash

2yr

Alesand
AlesandLv2

I can understand the MC, he is insecure, generally looks like an indecisive amoeba than a man, I would say, an eternally depressed whiner. However, he was born in this world as Dovahkiin, this must mean something. Dovahkiin is a legendary person, decisive, strong-willed, and there is nothing here that would remind me of a dragonborn

2yr
lord_dark
lord_darkLv1

Reveal spoiler

2yr
SHEOGORATH
SHEOGORATHLv5

Here is the doom-driven review. The Elder Scrolls told of their return. Their defeat was merely delay, until the time after Oblivion opened, When the sons of Skyrim would spill their own blood. But no-one wanted to believe – believe they even existed...And when the truth finally downs, it downs with FIRE. Wabbajack!

2yr
DRIPPINGwet
DRIPPINGwetLv2

Bad. Forced drama. Author cant express what the character's emotion, I cant connect to the characters especially the mc. Just read it guys, tell me if im wrong.

2yr
DaoOfGay
DaoOfGayLv5

Dovahkiin, Dovahkiin Naal ok zin los vahriin Wah dein vokul mahfaeraak ahst vaal! Ahrk fin norok paal graan Fod nust hon zindro zaan Dovahkiin, fah hin kogaan mu draal! Huzrah nu, kul do od, wah aan bok lingrah vod Ahrk fin tey, boziik fun, do fin gein! Wo lost fron wah ney dov Ahrk fin reyliik do jul Voth aan suleyk wah ronit faal krein Ahrk fin kel lost prodah, Do ved viing ko fin krah, Tol fod zeymah win kein meyz fundein! Alduin, feyn do jun, Kruziik vokun staadnau, Voth aan bahlok wah diivon fin lein! Nuz aan sul, fent alok, Fod fin vul dovah nok, Fen kos nahlot mahfaeraak ahrk ruz! Paaz Keizaal fen kos stin nol bein Alduin jot! Dovahkiin, Dovahkiin Naal ok zin los vahriin Wah dein vokul mahfaeraak ahst vaal! Ahrk fin norok paal graan Fod nust hon zindro zaan Dovahkiin, fah hin kogaan mu draal!

2yr
Rishab3
Rishab3Lv1

The story has a lot of potential and a very good start. I'm looking forward for the next chapters and will be putting this story in my library.

2yr
Mr_3twy
Mr_3twyLv2

Very solid starting and the writing quality is impressive, the events managed to pull me in and keep me entertained without distracting me from the main character

2yr
ArcanePlayer
ArcanePlayerLv1

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2yr
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