Item: New World Magic System in Asoiaf
Rating: 2.2
Author: Darius_Chromwell

Darius_ChromwellLv43yr

2021-12-19 15:56

Love the concept but the story feels forced.🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃

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