Darius_Chromwell

It started out so good, there aren’t really enough Star Wars fanfics on here especially system ones. I like the system it’s simple but effective and I really enjoyed the MC for the first few chapters. But forcing the MC to act like the original anakin when interacting with the other characters is completely ruining it for me. In less than 3 chapters I have completely lost interest in this fanfic just because of that.

Also I’m not saying the novel is bad just that if the author can’t write character interactions for pvp scenes then they should just avoid it altogether so that they don’t drag the good content down.

Okay I know that it’s based in a mmo world but the author really needs to give up on writing player interaction scenes because it’s literally a copy paste situation. I’m only on around chapter 35 but the two major character conflicts with other players were word for word exactly the same. The main character doesn’t bother using his weapon and slaps a random guy into critical hp and then the crowd parts and he walks away. WORD FOR WORD exactly the same both times.

Cool a necromancer fanfic… is what I would say if the main character didn’t get randomly nerfed in the first 5 chapters. I mean he goes from haphazardly tormenting the ministry with his wandless necromancy in chapter one to somehow needing a wand and not being able to detect the soul fragments on both harry or quirrell…

I haven’t liked any Naruto fanfics in a long while now, but this one i actually enjoyed, the mc is strong but not overwhelmingly so and the characters actually have personality which I find a lot of fanfics struggle to do without making everyone feel like robots.

Okay let me first say that this fanfic starts out fine, for the first 20 to 30 chapters it stays pretty consistent but after that you can start to see the author forgetting things that they said in the earlier chapters, abilities change to become far more convenient or powerful than what was first written. My primary example of that being Yamato’s wood release, it was stated in the earlier chapters that unlike the first hokage the wood release of Yamato produces dead wood lacking in vitality. But in later chapters you can see the Mc using that same wood release to create a vast and vibrant jungle directly from an arid desert…

I have several complaints about this fanfic but I’ll try to keep it fairly simple. 1. This one is honestly a bit of a gripe but it kept bothering me as I read, it’s the fact that the chapters feel way too short, and I don’t even think they were actually that short but at the end of every chapter there was a list of other books translated by this translator and the list was like 3 times longer than the actual chapters. I get that you want people to check out your other work but make an auxiliary chapter for them and just reference the one chapter at the end instead of making people read through them every single chapter. 2. I’ll be honest with you after the first one I was already ready to drop this but this just sealed the deal for me, i read the title and thought “ohh cool, a apothecary fanfic this will be great” and then come to find that the MC’s personality is completely unlikable and he doesn’t even like his own class and wants to change it. I’ll assume he eventually sticks with it but that’s enough for me to say goodbye for now.

I’m fairly certain that someone else has already translated this fanfic on here, but I can see from the synopsis that the translation quality is pretty good so I’m not really gonna hate on someone else posting this again. And to be honest I didn’t really read much into the other translation so I can’t say for sure how the quality compares. I’m not really much of a honkai fan to begin with.

We don’t see enough world of Warcraft fanfics on here and the dnd system fits this so perfectly.

Decent idea poor execution, I always enjoy a good shopkeeper story but this is definitely what’s commonly known as a crack fiction, I can’t tell if it’s meant to be like this or if it’s an ai generated story but I’m leaning more toward the former rather than the latter.