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Tunic01
Tunic01Lv151yr
2023-09-21 23:40

Imagine making it a harem and not adding the tags..

New World Magic System in Asoiaf

Damon_Jager
3.5
55 Chs

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DaoisteHo6ya
DaoisteHo6yaLv1

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2yr

Darius_Chromwell
Darius_ChromwellLv4

Love the concept but the story feels forced.馃檭馃檭馃檭馃檭馃檭馃檭馃檭馃檭馃檭馃檭馃檭馃檭馃槥馃槥馃槥馃槥馃槥馃槥馃槥馃槥馃槥馃檭馃檭馃檭馃檭馃檭馃檭馃檭馃檭馃檭馃檭馃檭馃檭馃檭馃檭馃檭馃檭馃檭馃檭馃檭馃檭馃檭馃檭馃檭馃檭馃檭馃檭馃檭馃檭馃檭

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No_No_4004
No_No_4004Lv4

Your story is really good but it is lacking in the update frequency department. If you updated at least once a week you would probably draw in a lot more readers to this amazing story. Now if you update even more frequently that would make all of your readers happy but would also probably lead to burn out.

2yr
moh999
moh999Lv6

a refreshing idea I give you that, but it's kinda rushed to me, I'm never telling you to stop as yours is better than 75% of the FFs available on this app, I'm just advising you to not fall in the same mistakes as I. yours Moh999

3yr
Exelia
ExeliaLv4

Several pieces of ASOIAF's lore was easily discarded. You threw around magic left and right without the consequences that makes up the world the MC was in. The idea behind your story was great, but it was so poorly written that in turn makes it difficult to like. Not complaining about unrealisticallity since magic is involved but you threw away logic altogether.

2yr
Demonbeastzaphran
DemonbeastzaphranLv12

The idea and concept behind this is great but I really couldn鈥檛 get passed how bad the grammar was,mostly in the form of unfinished words and wrong placement of them.In the future i would suggest just making sure your word placement and sentence structure make sense and flows,other than that though I hope you keep writing and improving.

2yr
dscot345
dscot345Lv12

Reveal spoiler

2yr
ViciousHandler
ViciousHandlerLv5

Fawk disappointing fic. Right off the bat MC is OP as he transmigrated. No issue with murdering people. Know how to use magic like it was part of him. Explanation for it was horrible!!!

2yr
D_REAPER
D_REAPERLv14

I don't usually do reviews but this was one of the most awesome books I've ever read I'd say this needed more detail but with the type of stuff he was putting in the book I think the amount of detail he did was good because it would have been hard to explain a lot of stuff other than that I would have liked more interaction with the family and their characters on a more personal level but overall absolutely love the story

2yr
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