Love the concept but the story feels forced.🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃

Your story is really good but it is lacking in the update frequency department. If you updated at least once a week you would probably draw in a lot more readers to this amazing story. Now if you update even more frequently that would make all of your readers happy but would also probably lead to burn out.

a refreshing idea I give you that, but it's kinda rushed to me, I'm never telling you to stop as yours is better than 75% of the FFs available on this app, I'm just advising you to not fall in the same mistakes as I. yours Moh999

Several pieces of ASOIAF's lore was easily discarded. You threw around magic left and right without the consequences that makes up the world the MC was in. The idea behind your story was great, but it was so poorly written that in turn makes it difficult to like. Not complaining about unrealisticallity since magic is involved but you threw away logic altogether.

The idea and concept behind this is great but I really couldn’t get passed how bad the grammar was,mostly in the form of unfinished words and wrong placement of them.In the future i would suggest just making sure your word placement and sentence structure make sense and flows,other than that though I hope you keep writing and improving.

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Imagine making it a harem and not adding the tags..

Fawk disappointing fic. Right off the bat MC is OP as he transmigrated. No issue with murdering people. Know how to use magic like it was part of him. Explanation for it was horrible!!!

I don't usually do reviews but this was one of the most awesome books I've ever read I'd say this needed more detail but with the type of stuff he was putting in the book I think the amount of detail he did was good because it would have been hard to explain a lot of stuff other than that I would have liked more interaction with the family and their characters on a more personal level but overall absolutely love the story