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Zabne123Lv151yr
2023-09-12 17:12

I really like the story and I was excited about the main character actually telling someone the truth in the beginning but I can't read it anymore because of the non stop descriptions on everything. It's like you went and found every word you could to describe one single thing every paragraph. Sometimes it gets so bad you take up a whole chapter. If you could dial it down then I think you have something here.

Apocalypse Cheater

ADboy245
3.8
262 Chs

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Canon_FodderLv4

can't agree more chapte 40 is the max i can endure , i feel my blood pressure rising while reading the same thing in different ways over and over , u can literally resume 40 chapter in 10 chapters max

1yr
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Zabne123Lv15

The story itself had some good potential too so I was really bummed about it.

Canon_Fodder:can't agree more chapte 40 is the max i can endure , i feel my blood pressure rising while reading the same thing in different ways over and over , u can literally resume 40 chapter in 10 chapters max
1yr
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solo_leveling_godLv4

one piece???

1yr
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Godfred_DavidLv4

yeah, you really should try to tone it down.

10mth
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ImStill_A_JanitorLv4

Don't read Gravity Mage then.

10mth
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Tokyo_RuLv1

90 % of words are over written, an 50 % are un needed and over descriptive , beyond what could be acceptable or fine. Premise was fine then , 2 bit piece of junk writer happened, maybe he cant fill more pages ortherwise. With a work that cant be resumed at 10 pages , like this. And let no begin with plot holes. Puuf

1yr
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Yorky_ManLv14

there's just way too much infodump,there's whole chapters of him just thinking out his thoughts.

1yr
16
3
LeviathanEnvyLv14

The story is great, but I wanted to ask if you could make an auxiliary chapters of the important ppl and pictures and status of the Mc and plz try to make the status screen and systems notification and when he gets exp and stuff more in order or a different font or in this [] makes it look cleaner [img=recommend][img=update]

1yr
14
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Hhh_YhbnLv2

I like it so far and keep it up I think this can turn into a amazing novel. Good good good good good good good good good goood good good Good good good good good good good good good goood good good Good good good good good good good good good goood good good

3yr
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Canon_FodderLv4

the chapter is basically mc inner monolog and the author keep repeating the same paragraph over and over in different ways , everything is overly described , every word he say is accompanied with 4 useless line , it's like when u are at a shool test and u have no idea about what to write so u keep adding meaningless word to stretch the answer but as we all know the results would be mediocre , every chapter is filled with mc plans , emotions about the future and that start grinding your drive to keep reading this book .

1yr
8
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ElPredatorLv4

Goood 👌

3yr
7
Jironimo_RossLv4

every sentence is followed by pic related drivel, interestingly enough this filler driver almost never has any mistakes, hmm. so can you stop this author. your grammar and writing quility is at best 1-2 stars and magically this filth is atleast 4. I don't know if you are copy pasting it from somewhere or using ai but its nothing more than padding. so please stop

1yr
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xYunchexLv13

Sorry to tell you author but for me your novel is sloppy and I'm tired after only 25 chapters. 140 characters mmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmm

1yr
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thomas_terrellLv15

it was better before the change and only forty some odd chapters free just goes to show some things are to good to be true

1yr
5
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