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Canon_Fodder
Canon_FodderLv41yr
2023-09-21 21:55

the chapter is basically mc inner monolog and the author keep repeating the same paragraph over and over in different ways , everything is overly described , every word he say is accompanied with 4 useless line , it's like when u are at a shool test and u have no idea about what to write so u keep adding meaningless word to stretch the answer but as we all know the results would be mediocre , every chapter is filled with mc plans , emotions about the future and that start grinding your drive to keep reading this book .

Apocalypse Cheater

ADboy245
3.8
254 Chs

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Spirit_Immortal
Spirit_ImmortalLv4

check out..... blood Warrior Harem ...just once if u don't wanna have regrets

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Tokyo_Ru
Tokyo_RuLv1

90 % of words are over written, an 50 % are un needed and over descriptive , beyond what could be acceptable or fine. Premise was fine then , 2 bit piece of junk writer happened, maybe he cant fill more pages ortherwise. With a work that cant be resumed at 10 pages , like this. And let no begin with plot holes. Puuf

1yr

Yorky_Man
Yorky_ManLv14

there's just way too much infodump,there's whole chapters of him just thinking out his thoughts.

1yr
LeviathanEnvy
LeviathanEnvyLv14

The story is great, but I wanted to ask if you could make an auxiliary chapters of the important ppl and pictures and status of the Mc and plz try to make the status screen and systems notification and when he gets exp and stuff more in order or a different font or in this [] makes it look cleaner [img=recommend][img=update]

1yr
Zabne123
Zabne123Lv15

I really like the story and I was excited about the main character actually telling someone the truth in the beginning but I can't read it anymore because of the non stop descriptions on everything. It's like you went and found every word you could to describe one single thing every paragraph. Sometimes it gets so bad you take up a whole chapter. If you could dial it down then I think you have something here.

1yr
Hhh_Yhbn
Hhh_YhbnLv2

I like it so far and keep it up I think this can turn into a amazing novel. Good good good good good good good good good goood good good Good good good good good good good good good goood good good Good good good good good good good good good goood good good

2yr
BilPredator
BilPredatorLv4

Goood 👌

2yr
xYunchex
xYunchexLv13

Sorry to tell you author but for me your novel is sloppy and I'm tired after only 25 chapters. 140 characters mmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmm

1yr
Jironimo_Ross
Jironimo_RossLv4

every sentence is followed by pic related drivel, interestingly enough this filler driver almost never has any mistakes, hmm. so can you stop this author. your grammar and writing quility is at best 1-2 stars and magically this filth is atleast 4. I don't know if you are copy pasting it from somewhere or using ai but its nothing more than padding. so please stop

1yr
thomas_terrell
thomas_terrellLv15

it was better before the change and only forty some odd chapters free just goes to show some things are to good to be true

1yr
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