Review Detail of Fantasii in Fallout system in the multiverse
Review detail
I would suggest that you take a pause from uploading as often, and try proofreading and formatting your story. Chapter length is small, and every single one has multiple rin on sentences. It would be great if you could rewrite/edit this as it has potential but feels rushed and poorly fleshed out.
Fallout system in the multiverse
loskro
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loskro:i have contemplated your review and decided to set a few things straight. first when i write this story i do so with the idea that the reader has played the games in question. this is the lack of fleshed out you refer to. second i am writing as a hobby so there will be no professional level editing and grammer. third i write in the same manner in which i think , which in this case is in run on sentences. this means that i would have to change my entire style of writing forcefully causing me unnecessary amounts of stress for a hobby. and lastly the chapter lengths are indeed a bit short so i will double them from now on.
i have contemplated your review and decided to set a few things straight. first when i write this story i do so with the idea that the reader has played the games in question. this is the lack of fleshed out you refer to. second i am writing as a hobby so there will be no professional level editing and grammer. third i write in the same manner in which i think , which in this case is in run on sentences. this means that i would have to change my entire style of writing forcefully causing me unnecessary amounts of stress for a hobby. and lastly the chapter lengths are indeed a bit short so i will double them from now on.
No need for perfection, if you have time, just give them a quick pass through Grammarly, besides the formatting I have no complains.
loskro:i have contemplated your review and decided to set a few things straight. first when i write this story i do so with the idea that the reader has played the games in question. this is the lack of fleshed out you refer to. second i am writing as a hobby so there will be no professional level editing and grammer. third i write in the same manner in which i think , which in this case is in run on sentences. this means that i would have to change my entire style of writing forcefully causing me unnecessary amounts of stress for a hobby. and lastly the chapter lengths are indeed a bit short so i will double them from now on.
I see everyone mentioning grammerly to a lot of writers, but the free version of grammerly is pretty lackluster in its changes. That being said I would recomend just using google docs. Not only is it free, but the auto correct and grammar suggestions are a step above unpaid grammerly. Although keep in mind that this is just my personal opinion.
Lack luster or not it would at least remove the extra space around every comma and capitalize the word I which if you have ever taken any English course you would know that the letter i when used as a word is always capital and being so lazy that you refuse to hold down the shift key long enough to make it capital shows me that the level of effort being put in is near the bottom of the barrel. If you can't capitalize a single letter word how well will you do with keeping your own story straight and not writing massive plot holes because you forgot something from an earlier chapter, for example. Basically, if you suck at the basics of writing I'm going to assume you suck at the advanced stuff as well, regardless of if it is pure laziness or just ignorance. Also, any author that responds to criticism about how to improve, through tools that are largely automated and fix these minor things for you, with a rebuttal that they write this way and won't ever change it indicates that their ego is likely larger than their story ever will be.
ABananaStoleMyDog:I see everyone mentioning grammerly to a lot of writers, but the free version of grammerly is pretty lackluster in its changes. That being said I would recomend just using google docs. Not only is it free, but the auto correct and grammar suggestions are a step above unpaid grammerly. Although keep in mind that this is just my personal opinion.