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Slothful_Player
Slothful_PlayerLv41yr
2023-07-30 18:42

The story is amazing. It's got detailed worldbuilding that makes it feel lived in.The author might be one of the few good writers on Webnovel with his ability to keep you reading with a good mystery. However, for all my praise, I do have a major problem with the MC.To put it simply, the mc is one of the worst things in this story.He is so boring and bland, he is just another heroic Shonen Protagonist with no interesting or funny quirks that makes him feel human his only major character trait is being madly in love and that sucks because the romance between the mc and his love interest is very lack luster I mean I can see that they care for each other but their interactions lack chemistry

Fallout: Vault X

FourPin
4.7
223 Chs

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FourPin
FourPinAuthor

Thanks for reading and taking the time to review It always amazes me when people binge what quite long books. I worked hard to leave just enough breadcrumbs so the reveals come across as "of course!" and not "what?" so it's good to hear that the mystery works. As for John, he is a broad character by design. Partly to make him accessible and partly to build the world around him. My approach to their relationship is similar. I wanted their relationship to be grounded, normal, and most of all believable. It's not some torrid ya affair, but a fixed point to build on. Lackluster I feel is a bit unfair, but I see why someone may reach that conclusion. I hope you'll share more insights on vol lll, which is 95% written, and will be posted in the coming months. Thanks again!

1yr
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I've only played Fallout shelter, Fallout New Vegas, Fallout 3 and watched Fallout 4 gameplay, and I have to say that your story is quite good even if set in an original setting. Pace is not that fast compared to Steel Waste, and better in my opinion because it focused more on world building and character development. Looking forward for the new chapters. Good job, sir!

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Story is good, makes you want to know what comes next or why did that happen. but the writing is like poetry, its descriptive which good but it’s a little much when almost every sentence is like that though. so good story but chill on the poetry. last thing mc is all over the place.

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Lisa_Russell_4247
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I freaking love your story! Steel waste is good all but it does not have the depth and story like yours, SW is more like a faced pace Ok character wuixa thing 9ts always escalating, but yours...... It's a diamond on the rough! I am a huge fallout fan and there sent many good or complete fallout fanfic on here. I've read most 9f the good ones on archive 0f our 9wn and fanfiction . net. I'm not exactly sure when this tales place though... it this based in the games 9r an all 9ut original fallout world? Anyways I await each chapter with an eager smile, so keep it up! Just know I'm one of your readers![img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

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Good Stuff sir

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Please don’t drop this.

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One of the best Fallout fanfictions I've read in a long while. The characters, the suspense. When the first volume ended. I audibly gasped and was giddy to get to the next one. Love it.

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This is the best Fallout novel on this site. And also one of the best novels period. The author is well articulated, present an interesting story that keeps me coming back for more and more. Keep it up!

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We should all pray to Godd Howard to make this a movie that’s how good this story is. Or even better a 20+ hour series. It’s not written like most of the stuff on Webnovel, like iseakis or harems, but like an actual novel. It’s also formatted in a way so you don’t need to know a lot of Fallout lore to enjoy it. I’d wager that if you were completely new to the world of Fallout you’d enjoy this. As with the games and stories be prepared for some angst, blood and gore and dark stuff if completely new. I could rattle on but until next time: “From the Tower with power” dear readers and author. From the Tower with power :)

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This story is absolutely one if the best fallout fanfiction i have read. The story is original and compelling while keeping to the lore of fallout. the characters are all fleshed out and have real motivation and have depth. The writing is also very good and great grammar which is a definite plus. I know i will be looking forward to every knew chapter as i quickly fell in love with this story. To sum it up the author has done an amazing job and I can’t wait to see where your story goes!!!

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