Writing Quality 4/5: Good word diversisty and well structured sentences, the reader won't struggle here. There are however a few minor typo's every few chapter that are probably due to autocorrect. I.E: Brian becomes brain. Story Development 4.5/5: The story focuses Mc's inventions/discoveries used for the betterment of others, be it individuals or entire communities. Something I'd like more of is POV's from different characters it's one thing to see the improvements of the Burtons via the MC another entirely from the POV of say a guard. Character Design 4/5: The MC is too OP... Well that is sort of the point but I think I'd enjoy the story more if the MC had to work together with say Ceasar to perfect the manuals for the major heavenly laws. In the end it feels as if other major characters in the story can never measure up to the MC. Updating Stability 5/5: Seems to update frequently, I just binged nearly 300 chapters so I'll just leave 5/5. World Background 4.5/5: Starts out as pretty standard xinxia fare I.E: eight kingdoms, 4 empires multiple planets. While you read the story however the book/novel takes the time to introduce dukes and the royal family from both the Mc's kingdom and foreign kingdoms.
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LIKEIdk why you wrote so much lies. 4.5 for the WRITING? Literally there’s a wrong tense every other paragraph. Author doesnt care about capitalization too. Author can’t make descriptors and just CAPITALIZES the entire word like this to make things seem important or urgent or emotional. The fights are BAAAM BOOM BAM. Like… The only thing that is making me read is the concept. A 11 year old wattpad writer has better grammar like… Conversations are unnatural. The so called plans are obvious. Idkkk
I know author likes deleting reviews so if this isn’t enough for a 1 star for you here’s a few more reasons. PLOT HOLES with spoilers. As of chapter 60 MC went to an academy instead of just renting a house somewhere. Did he go to the academy? No. Did he learn anything there? No. Did he make his son learn anything there? No. He just went there to be bullied so theres an UNSATISFYING revenge plot even though the story couldve continued the same if he just rented a house. With it he’ll need to reveal MORE secrets. - Also has the worst leveling system. The novel couldve been elevated if he just had 9 stage of each realm and labeled it as such. Instead he took the designs of an LITRPG game then stopped there. And now the fights are like ‘This guy is lvl 17 but I’m only level 15!’ Is that immersive for a cultivation novel to you? Also author doesnt even define the difference between saints and levels below 20 so it’s just that. The face value is just the numbers and they represent nothing but additive strength. He also instigating fighting a war for Burtons territory, even though he has no connection to them anymore. Even though he wanted to stay away because he doesnt want to be used. And have felt the need to make Caesar famous. Could he have done it when hes had enough personal strength? Well yes. Did Caesar have fighting experience better than 99* of the realm? Well yes he didnt need to practice as much anymore because he’s bulldozing people already. He couldve waited patiently until Caesar is a saint because right now there has been no indicated bottlenecks. But ofcourse this leaves author with no plot to work with so he needs to make MC stupider and greedier even though his mindset in the literal first chapter is that he doesnt need fighting for useless stuff. The author doesnt even set a price for the tournament so that is even LESS excitement. And Caesar is also punished for winning too hard. How are they gonna have a competition and have no way to monitor the situation even if they have sages? Are the sages just that incompetent in this novel? Also there has been multiple fights but there was only one mention of law which is when he was fighting a cannon fodder. A law is never mentioned again. Author only takes the first step to world build then never takes another again. Also another bullshit about having the heart break when someone breaks their promises. You’d think that this would have happened more and would be better reinforced by information? No this is a one time throwaway to make MC seem smart because other wise its obvious it’s all stupid. You can make mc seem smart but you can never make an author who writes them smarter than the author. Also every single elder acts like kids. And they all act the same. 99% of the time I dont care about remembering characters because theres nothing to be remembered about them. Just think of them as plot points, this one will attack the mc, this one will protect the mc. Whats their personality? Who knows, the author doesnt!