Alright! As I promised, since I've now reach chap 57, I think I'm somewhat qualified to revuiew. Writing quality: Very good, I saw little to no error. Good phrasing, sentencing and nice layout of the paragraphs. 5🌟 Story development: Lets talk about this. 1st: Relationship status: Harem ( This does not mean anything lemme tell ya, the development of each characters can be considered near realistic and mc is not the best in this domain so don't worry about this) 2nd: The pace is very good and I didn't see any plot holes. 3rd: I'm worried about the potential of the story. Like I'm not talking about it going bad, no. I'm talking about the premises you set it upon. (lemme talk about this below in WB) Ngl, its very well made. As it progress, its becoming more and more interesting, however, I'm worried about the potential. Mc rose to power after hardship but a bit too quick since he already want to get in touch with that organistation and foreshadowing, theres's a big fight towards the end of vol2. I highly doubt that it'll reach 500 chapters +. Lets hope I'm wrong and may ladyluck and the literature goddess smile at you. 4🌟 Character design: Amongst the best I've read. 5🌟 Updating stability: Its one chapter every 2~3 days. For it has a lot of words in every chapters, 4🌟 World background: To continue the above, spoiler alert for whoever is reading this. We can expect the organisation to come for the mc in vol 2 but it is connected to Atlantis now so vol 2~3 will surely be based on this war. we can conclude that they will take ~100 chapters. By then mc is going to be strong enough, maybe opening a path to the arcane plane or lily succeed in her plan so vol 4 will be based on that? After that maybe some slice of life and then voldy attack. vol 5. But whats after those. That's what I'm interested in, otherwise this fanfic wouldn't even reach 500 chap. I'm thinking way too ahead maybe but please humour me. Iac 4🌟 Overall: Its a very good HP fanfiction which is heavily changed compared to the rest. I recommend for whoever is reading this to go read if you have not and support the author.
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LIKESo yeah it's said to be harem but we still don't know who the members are. Matter of fact, I doubt mc will find a gf in the first 100 or 200 chapters due to trust issues
LuciFer_Kardam:Bro, can you tell me if it's a harem or not? If it is a harem then who is in the harem? pls, tell me.
idrc since it hasn't updated in a while, but the harem is still not official, there is no official relationship established iirc again, but the development is nice, so don't mind that part and focus on storytelling and you'll see that its really actually good
Karolttott:Hello, my question is, who is in the harem??? I dislike Dafne 🙈 Martina I love her akiko yeah