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Necrom
NecromLv62yr
2022-09-08 13:45

Hey there! So, at the time of my posting I have read up to chapter 18 and what I can say is that the story is progressing really well! The events aren't rushed and they are given their own space in the story by giving suspense on certain things and other characters POV. The world background is so far pretty complex, this fanfic has an AU where many things have been changed in one way or another. The chapters a well polished, there aren't grammar error at all, if you notice any it is more of a isolated case and the update schedule is being followed as closely as possible expect if there is some problems or the author need to restock patr.o. Lastly the MC is a "normal" 11 years old: no reincarnato as far as he is concerned. He is just smart and cold calculative because of the life he has lived up until Hogwarts. His character has a huge margine for improvement and with how things are going it seems that the author has every intention to capitalise on this by using both old characters and the system to help MC grow. So yeah, read it. It really is worth it the time.

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Crimson_King
Crimson_KingLv6

So i have to ask, the story says Romance does it look like itll be harem or single love? Personally i dont mind either way but i prefer if its harem when multiple gurls are introduced and actually built well in the story. After all its a shame to build the female cast so well but then drop then all and only have one in the end.

Necrom
NecromLv6

it's starting to get to this point at the latest chapters (chp 103), but to me it doesn't seem to be an harem for various reasons that you will understand as you read the novel. I do think that Axel will understand himself more and more as well as his relationships with the people around him but if I understand the how the author is building his character, the love interest will be a single girl.

Crimson_King:So i have to ask, the story says Romance does it look like itll be harem or single love? Personally i dont mind either way but i prefer if its harem when multiple gurls are introduced and actually built well in the story. After all its a shame to build the female cast so well but then drop then all and only have one in the end.
Crimson_King
Crimson_KingLv6

Yeah, like I said I don’t mind single love. I just don’ like it when Authors give 3 girls equal screen time and development but then only pick one. You know some fans prefer the other two, especially cause they were also built up so they have a right to the MC too. In my view if Authors write female live interest well, and build them up properly then they cant whine and complain when fans ask for a harem or are upset when only one girl is picked and it’ not the one some fans wanted. Like if the Author doesn’t want any of that drama or backlash than they should have all other girls be background and focus on just the girl he wants so that us as fans don’t get our hopes up for other girls.

Necrom:it's starting to get to this point at the latest chapters (chp 103), but to me it doesn't seem to be an harem for various reasons that you will understand as you read the novel. I do think that Axel will understand himself more and more as well as his relationships with the people around him but if I understand the how the author is building his character, the love interest will be a single girl.
crazyspecter
crazyspecterLv14

so true I am reading a nice hp fanfic the author has bult 2 female oc with 1 having the most screen time but he won't add them in the harem morever he is building well even another female character and again he wont add it to the harem ...truly you cannot build well a character and give them a lot of screen time if you plan to discard them (male ones) or not make them love interests (female ones)

Crimson_King:Yeah, like I said I don’t mind single love. I just don’ like it when Authors give 3 girls equal screen time and development but then only pick one. You know some fans prefer the other two, especially cause they were also built up so they have a right to the MC too. In my view if Authors write female live interest well, and build them up properly then they cant whine and complain when fans ask for a harem or are upset when only one girl is picked and it’ not the one some fans wanted. Like if the Author doesn’t want any of that drama or backlash than they should have all other girls be background and focus on just the girl he wants so that us as fans don’t get our hopes up for other girls.
Crimson_King
Crimson_KingLv6

Yeah that would be so irritating to read. Like I get that not every well built female character has to be part of the harem. BUT Webnovel doesn’t have the best story or plots so most readers have become accustomed to any girl that gets screen time and character development is 95 percent of the time going to be part of the harem. It’s not something that can be changed just because the Author wants to have a single love. If they want to built up some characters stop focusing on females and focus more on male characters. Cause otherwise fans will never stop asking for the well built female characters to be in the MC. On another note what is the Harry Potter fic?

crazyspecter:so true I am reading a nice hp fanfic the author has bult 2 female oc with 1 having the most screen time but he won't add them in the harem morever he is building well even another female character and again he wont add it to the harem ...truly you cannot build well a character and give them a lot of screen time if you plan to discard them (male ones) or not make them love interests (female ones)
Writer_in_progress
Writer_in_progressLv13

single love

Crimson_King:So i have to ask, the story says Romance does it look like itll be harem or single love? Personally i dont mind either way but i prefer if its harem when multiple gurls are introduced and actually built well in the story. After all its a shame to build the female cast so well but then drop then all and only have one in the end.
Ancient_
Ancient_Lv13

Is the MC the same age as Harry Potter or old

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Spelloyal
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Honest Review time. If you want, you can skip the detailed criteria and just read the general evaluation and conclusion. I usually go easy on fanfic and give it 4 or 5 stars unless there's some major or annoying problem that I can't let go, but that's not the case with this fic. I'm giving it a 2,4 because I'm evaluating it mainly on the criteria I use for an original novel and not for a fic. As an original novel, I would give it 3.5 but this fic lost stars for failing in some points as a fanfic. The reason for this is that in addition to being a top-ranked fic, the author actually earns more than a thousand dollars from it on Patreon, charging much more per advanced chapter than an original novel charges per chapter. General Rating:It's an interesting story that's worth reading, but nothing very special., but it's heavily AU to the point where a simple change of name of some locations, spells and characters would make this a generic original novel that begins in an academy and system setting. I don't highly recommend it for those who hope to read a good fic about Harry Potter because they love the original work. I recommend readers start this fic thinking of it as an original novel rather than a fanfic. As an original novel this is an average story, but when placed among fanfics this becomes a top work in the webnovel where chapter releases need to be frequent and this is a great challenge for amateur authors who write for pleasure or as a hobby. Webnovel criteria: 1- Writing Quality - 3 stars: The writing quality is good, at the level of a good author, but there are some problems that anyone who read the entire fic at once notices and that's why I'm giving 3 stars in this category. It is worth mentioning that the author does not even correct errors such as a wrong name even when readers point it out. Examples are like when the MC was undercover and introduced himself to a character using a fake name, but that character called him by his real name, a skill that suddenly changed its name, another skill that should have been the next one to be unlocked in the class progression but it seems like it was simply forgotten as the MC didn't even mention the reason for never picking it up, and finally but most importantly the system became more and more irrelevant as the fic progressed. The system is still there, but it never gets screen time other than giving missions and rewards, and although it still helps the MC progress in some ways, this progression is rarely shown, the system status screen simply no longer appears in the fic. 2- Stability of Updates - 2 stars: It's not very stable, the fic has already gone through long hiatus, the chapters are currently released every two or three days and although it's very good for a fanfic, it's not the case for what it is almost an original novel where the author profits from it. 3- Story Development - 3 stars: It's average, the MC being a thief in a world where everyone is a wizard was interesting, but then ninjas and warriors were added and suddenly the MC is no longer special, just better than the rest, that added some more interesting fights but it took away what was special about MC as the author didn't do a good job of differentiating the Arcane Thief class from a Thief in a generic fantasy setting. As it is a completely AU scenario, there is no way to evaluate how well the author portrayed the events in relation to the original work since nothing more than names, some basic mechanics and some locations follow the original HP so I am once again evaluating it as an original novel and disregarding it. how well the author used the source material to write his fic. 4- Character Design - 1 star: To be honest, in an original novel I would give something like 3 stars since all the heroines are interesting and well written, but the rest of the characters are not developed and totally forgettable. I'm giving this one star because not even striking and easy-to-use characters like Snape, McGonagall and Dumbledore were relegated to characters with no presence who barely appear, so in addition to taking off 2 stars because only the MC and Heroines have presence, I'm taking more two for failing as a fanfic to use even something basic from the original material. 5- World Background - 3 stars: It is a generic fantasy setting where we have the world of darkness, the world of light and the weaker human world in between. In the human world we have Atlantis, an advanced and reclusive magical civilization that lost much of its past heritage due to disaster. Nothing bad, but nothing original here. Conclusion: This is less of a fic and more of a generic original novel that is interesting and worth reading, but would never top the rankings when competing with other original novels. When compared to other fics instead of original novels, this one ends up standing out.

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