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2022-01-31 07:53

maybe the idea was good but has grammar errors. The biggest problem, the story need a good Edit and i mean a REALLY good Edit. .

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cheelzy
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maybe the story's idea was good but IT has grammar errors the biggest problem is THAT it needs a good editor AND I MEAN VERY (SUPER MEGA VERY) GOOD EDITOR ( you my man needs some milk (English lessons) )

Hultra
HultraLv14

Tried to read first paragraph. Firsth thought after reading was: "Is this truly the authors mastery of english or am i reading something that went through Google Translate?"

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