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Khayzer
KhayzerLv43yr
2021-08-19 14:28

So you decided to restart the story? For some reason I remember staying in chapter 300 and want to see if it changed too much to read. PS: I delete review when you reply.

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FanHarem
FanHaremAuthor

thank you for the review... but I don't understand the ps part

FanHarem
FanHaremAuthor

or... are you asking me if it's changed too much?

Khayzer
KhayzerLv4

Did this change too much?

FanHarem:or... are you asking me if it's changed too much?
FanHarem
FanHaremAuthor

I definitely changed quite a few things. The pacing is slow, too. but the end product wouldn't be diverted, too much, you know

Khayzer:Did this change too much?
Seraphim28
Seraphim28Lv15

Hello, didn't read your previous version, saw mention of Mizuryuu Kei and needed to ask... NTR? It's a very important question.

FanHarem:I definitely changed quite a few things. The pacing is slow, too. but the end product wouldn't be diverted, too much, you know
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