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Idk_wqe2
Idk_wqe2Author3yr
2021-10-21 02:59

well I don't know what to say, Grammarly sometimes, corrects the words to some things I don't want, but I try my best when I'm interested, so I'm sorry if you don't like it

thrown into naruto (Up for adoption)

Idk_wqe2
4.0
59 Chs

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Blanf
BlanfLv5

Heres some constructive criticism: I would say capitalization is one of the problems. Fixing some spacing may also help make the story look cleaner and more presentable.

3yr
Orange_Car_Slave
Orange_Car_SlaveLv13

プレミアムが使えます

3yr
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asaade
asaadeLv10

it looks like prologue has been skipped, what was his background? why did the village need to compensate him? what kind of system is this? an incomplete gamer system? i even see a dungeon in this, using flashback as a way to see his past and how he get his system or what system is that is trash imo

3yr

KenNarimatsuu
KenNarimatsuuLv13

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3yr
Solomolecule
SolomoleculeLv14

Reveal spoiler

3yr
Hero_MT
Hero_MTLv5

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3yr
Dispersium
DispersiumLv4

this fanfic have some potential but author just to lazy to write decent character background and decent story, in my opinion you better think if this fanfic just story board from author and not the fanfic itself

3yr
Atikar
AtikarLv11

The chapters are fast. I give four star because being in the same team as as 7 is a bit too used for me and it is still very early in the story at the time of reviewing. But I do suggest that you tap more into the concept of weapons as I see everyone is focusing on ninjutsu and eight gates nowadays and some fuinjutsu. But never enough of bikujutsu(hope I spelled tight. Stuff like kenjutsu is cool. I think that enlarging shurikens into fuma shurikens and stuff like that.

3yr
Dissapointed_One
Dissapointed_OneLv4

That was the worst thing i have read. The writhing is horrendous, mc is more like author is speking, the story is garbage, story moves like a rocket.

3yr
Tom_tucker2
Tom_tucker2Lv3

This is an okay novel. Let's talk about the pros and cons. The pros is that it's easily legible without too glaring of a literacy issue and that they update quite frequently but the major con in my opinion is that the author has no idea where he want to go and make it less enjoyable. Like how he switch from temari to Samui to temari again because he didn't know what he wanted or how he just puts up a vote on what's gonna happen next. It feels less like a thought out and we'll tighten novel to a mish mash of ideas he thinks are cool but doesn't know how to connect them

3yr
Tsugihagu
TsugihaguLv1

is a generic story is nothing new. it's even more what these guys have with the gamer system, it's already boring it's always the same thing

3yr
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