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2021-08-09 10:40

Hi author, well thought out story. Characters are nicely designed and the author has got her own unique way to write. There are minor spelling errors which I believe, will be improve by the time. So, dear author, continue with your good work. My best wishes!

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Great story. There are many characters in this story but the two main contrasting characters are Lily a village girl whose dreams of working in the palace are shattered and Emily a princess who shattered her dreams. At first, you found both of them not likeable (for me not liking Lily was a personal choice I liked Emily more than lily). But villains are not completely evil, let's see their back story in this series. In this journey, we have two princes one who believes in love Leo and the other is quite loose. Writing Quality - It was good grammatical errors here and there but it didn't affect my reading. I think the thoughts of the characters are too long. Story development - The plot starts with showing friendship, first love, jealousy. But I think there can still be an improvement. Character design - I think it's flawed a little bit. The character seems too plot-driven like if Emily is a jealous princess (I thought of her as such), it still doesn't change the fact she a royalty someone surviving in the palace. How can she make a stupid discussion of going in the forest at night alone? She doesn't have backing from her father (from the flashback of him crushing flowers under his feet) her mother is dead. That means she survived on her own in the palace so why doesn't she use her brain in that situation, we can say she has never been in the village but still. Updating stability - Creation is hard I will give props to the author here. World background - The setting is a fantasy world but more can be done in this. Will I recommend this story? Yes, I will. keep up the great work author 😁👍.

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