this is şhit bro mc is wimp and also don't want to change the future why not go after eve oh because she and mark was together in the original bullşhit then you went and introduce this maya girl from another comic that's bullşhit it would be better if the mc was single and also the mc is earth protector like isn't mark already there I can predict this will just be like the original with the mc following cannon because hes scared to mess up the future bro your whole existence has mess up the future god also doesn't the mc knows the future why is he surprise when omni man killed the guardians *sigh* im not tell you how to write your story but a mc that is the opposite of mark(cold,ruthless,maybe evil) and have a big ambition like being a ruler or becoming the strongest no matter what morally would of been good also you made the mc study alot for what just to make a suit all that knowledge the mc has are not being used well this is şhit if your here for a naive mc with no ambition and the same as the original the this is for you
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LIKEFadeKnight:It’s a fanfiction. A good one so far. Things aren't supposed to go according to the original. He can add whoever he wants. It’s too early to say the character is bad. I really don’t know why 8 people agree with you.
FadeKnight:It’s a fanfiction. A good one so far. Things aren't supposed to go according to the original. He can add whoever he wants. It’s too early to say the character is bad. I really don’t know why 8 people agree with you.
FadeKnight:It’s a fanfiction. A good one so far. Things aren't supposed to go according to the original. He can add whoever he wants. It’s too early to say the character is bad. I really don’t know why 8 people agree with you.
estas siendo exageradamente negativo con esta calificación. entiendo lo molesto que puede ser un MC de fanfic se enfoque únicamente en seguir la trama original pero no considero que sea completamente en este caso. Para empezar es mas "realista" y coherente tratar de conservar el mayor conocimiento "futuro" ( tendrías que ver los comics, hay peores cosas tener que enfrentarse a omniman, el imperio viltrumita, robot, la invasión de las versiones malvadas de Invencible de otras realidades, etc). Segundo, el MC no se lo toma como si el mundo gira alrededor de él mismo (es decir, no es un patán que se cree por en sima de otros o necesita/desea aparearse con cualquier chica que se cruza), ama y respeta a su familia, a de mas, porque crees que quería estar con Eva? Es mas, si termina dejando de lado el tema de ser un "superhéroe" y se centra en otras cosas como ayudar otras civilizaciones/mundos/universos o simplemente después del inevitable conflicto contra el imperio viltrumita podría decidir dejar el manto de héroe por unos siglos y usar su mejor recurso, su tiempo de vida tan longevo, entre otras cosas posibles. Cuestión, poner 1/5 de estrellas, porque el MC es un buen hermano, prefiere evitar los problemas que conlleva alterar la "trama", no busca tener un harem sin sentido, no considera su "realidad" como una "fantasía", entre otras cosas; por no decir que estas dejando de lado, la escritura, el desarrollo de fondo/mundo/personajes solo por que no te guste algo de la trama, prácticamente te cagas en el trabajo del autor Pondría mas cosas pero ya es mucho texto
FadeKnight:It’s a fanfiction. A good one so far. Things aren't supposed to go according to the original. He can add whoever he wants. It’s too early to say the character is bad. I really don’t know why 8 people agree with you.