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Es en la lectura de las historias, buenas o malas, donde encuentro el placer de seguir viviendo. Equipo NoHarem
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Writing Quality (4★), Updating Stability (3★), Story Development (2★), Character Design (2★), world background (4★). I got to read up to chapter 20, it's entertaining but the MC, is an emo, the characters seem like flat cliches. There are moments when the narrative lets you see what a jerk the MC is but then it resorts to the secondary characters and how it tries to highlight in a forced way, "the greatness of the MC". I can't say the novel is bad but it's not very good either. It fulfills the function of entertaining. (Traductor)
If some secret and scientific group wanted to study or use MC, it would be interesting and logical if they were offered a paid contract, with weekly hours. Obviously due to the plot he can have a confrontation with a secret group for trying to retain or kidnap him only for Mc to tell him at the end "they could have paid me to study me" or "if you know what I am, and unlike the hulk, I have brain, we were able to reach a mutual agreement" (traductor)
It would be interesting that the mc left children on the way, and that their descendants (with some unique trait) form a millenary family and among them, some are immortal or have prolonged lives of 400 or 1000 years. Thus making a new supernatural species of white hair. All this to create new plots and expand the background of the world. Hopefully it won't be the typical Twilight fanfic cliche, where they arrive at Forck Village, fall in love with one of the Cullens and leave all the development of thousands of years behind. Translated with DeepL.com (free version)
It would be interesting that the mc left children on the way, and that their descendants (with some unique trait) form a millenary family and among them, some are immortal or have prolonged lives of 400 or 1000 years. Thus making a new supernatural species of white hair. All this to create new plots and expand the background of the world. Hopefully it won't be the typical Twilight fanfic cliche, where they arrive at Forck Village, fall in love with one of the Cullens and leave all the development of thousands of years behind. Translated with DeepL.com (free version)
I remember that Aron had a sister that he secretly murdered for fear that the three leading heads of the Vulturis would split up, causing the severe depression of one of the three and causing his wives to be "locked up and drugged so they wouldn't complain". I don't know if it was before or after their war with the Romanian clan. The MC could save the sister, prevent Aron's "evil" course, Marco (one of the 3 main heads and husband of Aron's sister) would owe the MC a big favor, and the other members of the Voturi clan, seeing Aron's treachery, could kill him, lock him up or expel him from the clan. In the end the wives of the three heads would take control of the clan. (traductor)
Quality of writing (3): sometimes switches from first person to third person in sudden ways, but it is understandable. Stability of updates (1): the last update was 5 months ago. Development of the story (1): it is a bad cut and paste of different series or movies. Example: he gave his family, the same spider that bit peter parker, all in the same day. the characters know he is in marvel, it is simply too strong the power of the plot for my taste. Character design (1): simple, without relevance, they are more of filler than contributions to the plot. World background (1): I only see a story where the fantasies of a child are fulfilled. Translated with www.DeepL.com/Translator (free version)
Writing Quality (3) Updating Stability (3) Story Development (2) Character Design (2) world background (1) You can read and understand the writing. In the time since a few chapters have been released, I assume that I have just started and it does not seem that the author will abandon any time soon. I found gaps when he says how when he says he knows what powers he has, how he knows about the "genetically perfect" improvements in his body, how did a common person (from the modern world) come to have a strong conviction of desire for power and dominance? As for the substance, I didn't feel it. It was as if I were walking a path and there was someone (let's say "plot") who pulls the strings and decides when and how the MC has to think/do. Not in a way that doesn't feel natural to me. Good luck to the author and I hope that this negative criticism is useful and not a simple annoyance (translator)
I like the way the story is going (traductor)
When I read the chapter I imagine it as cartoon animations and it ends up being short and insipid. It doesn't seem like a bad fanfic to me, it just gives me the impression that the contents of the chapter are few. That is to say, in this chapter he goes to Gwen's place, they see the issue of clothing, a little flirting and Peter shows off the ability to copy the clothes with his body and that's it. It seems stuffed, the only relevant thing being the clothing. I repeat, the fanfic is not bad, but I am no longer feeling as much enthusiasm as at the beginning (traductor)