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MarcGem
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2021-09-19 02:53

The writing quality of this book frightens me. I know English isn't the author's first language, but it's as bad as google translate for the 33 chapters that I've read. This book seriously needs an editor. Any editor that's well-versed in English and above the mental age of 14 will change this book for the better... or at least make it less excruciating to read. The story is quite a cliche, but I like the genre. I've only read a bit, so I can't say much, but it's pretty generic and monotone for a start. I can't see much character design. MC's backstory is very overused, and side characters only stay to the side. World background is at least interesting. It's always the world background bringing up the entire genre. Likewise, I only read this novel to immerse myself in the genre. And I only write reviews when novels are either extremely good or downright bad. I hope the author makes the plot exciting and hires an editor so I can continue to read and give it a chance once more. I'm forced to stop reading at 33 chapters in.

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ForcedToMake
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As someone who has gotten to about chapter 170 or so, the writing does improve shortly into the premium chapters - the first 30 to 40 chapters are rather rough however so if you've got the time and passes try to get about 9 chapters into premium (use your passes!) and see if you like what you see. There are parts of this novel that drive me nuts (some of the misuse of gaming terms as well as the Indian numbering system which I swear when the author converts it to spelled out numbers it changes by a factor of 10 half the time, basically its very jarring to read as it just seems like a writing mistake to someone used to western numbering) but overall the plot is decent, and its an overall enjoyable read - though this definitely is more of a novel to use your passes on imo.

YoungMasterMeng
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The job in these novel pretty much useless cause , a knight can bow and arrow the archer used and they don’t a skill distinguish them and I drop when Ethan a trillionaire react like antagonist parent

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YoungMasterMeng:The job in these novel pretty much useless cause , a knight can bow and arrow the archer used and they don’t a skill distinguish them and I drop when Ethan a trillionaire react like antagonist parent
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Here is my review after more than 170 chapters: My subjective opinion: I will cut this one short. The novel is excellent, and I will read it till the end. The author takes the effort with every update, and you can see that he cares about the readers. There is only one negative thing about the novel: the writing quality. Writing Quality: Annoying to read. Why? The author doesn't care about the numbers and sometimes uses the Indian metric system, which is a grave mistake. The math is so wrong sometimes. Oh boy. The chapters are also claimed to be edited, but I still see a lot of grammatical errors such as typos like theives instead of thieves and such. Update Stability: Excellent. 2, sometimes three chapters a day. The author delivers on the bonus chapter promises and is consistent. Story Development: It is not unique; however, the author cares about the story. The characters have personalities and backgrounds. The story is easy to follow, and you won't find many plot holes. The story concentrates mainly on the game, but the real-life part is just as enjoyable. In short: The story will keep you interested. Characters Design: Maybe the best part of this novel. Well thought out deep characters with easy-to-remember background stories. World Background: Getting more complex as the chapters go. The gaming world of omega is very deep and still mostly unexplored. There is a lot of foreshadowing about the other races, strong NPC's, and the past. The real-life is mainly focused around the characters and not built up. Countries such as country P country J country X and six trillionaires rule this world. We get to know more about MC and his family. You can also smell romance in the air. Afterword: The story starts just like every other VRMMO story, but the author got hooked and built his own world. I thoroughly enjoy every chapter, and this is the first-ever novel where I dumped all my coins.

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