It's a good fanfic, with good vocabulary, using various expressions and words, not just the same set over and over again. (Bear in mind that the author uses his phone to make this, not a computer, making it harder) in the grammar was the punctuation (overly using "," instead of proper points ".") The only mistakes I found which he could have used more to separate sentences and how he sometimes forgets to put capital letters after punctuation and the beginning of paragraphs and dialogues. The paragraphs are structured well enough. I would suggest Grammarly to correct some mistakes, it's a really convenient tool. The story has an original beginning (in the DB world) and a nice plot overall. The human as a choice of race is always cool since it forces the protagonist to not rely on OP transformations, so it's nice. For all fans of Dragon Ball, It's worth reading.
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LIKE*The only mistakes I found in the grammar was the punctuation which he could have used more to separate sentences and how he sometimes forgets to put capital letters after punctuation and the beginning of paragraphs and dialogues. -=- I messed up one of the paragraphs. Here is the correction.
Thank you for the review and I'll make sure to improve in the criticized areas.
