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2022-12-24 11:10

Writing this at the 470+ chapter mark The overall story is amazing and I see a lot of potential when it comes to world building and the overaching story. one minor problem is slow story development but currently it's bearable and at the current pace, I see this novel going over the 1000 chapter mark before it ends.

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Sword_immortal1
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thank you so much for the review, I'm glad you're enjoying it 😊

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Sword_immortal1
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Author here giving a slightly biased review to help get the ball rolling as well as clarifying a few details. 1) Since English is my first language the grammar and quality of writing is more than readable however, I will make mistakes so please point them out, always appreciate grammar catchers 😁 2) Regarding the issues with the MC I'd like to clarify that regardless of his intelligent or how old his body portrays him to be, he is still a new born. His personality hasn't had a chance to develop and all his emotions are new. He's similar to a child, innocent, curious and prone to exaggerated emotions i.e. may be similar to those cliché Japanese protagonists however that is only in the beginning. 3) Many people have stopped reading the novel, both on web novel and royal road after the first few chapters mainly due to the MC and FMC quirks and they leave comments detailing as such. I would like if you could give the novel a chance, read at least the first dozen or so chapters before casting judgement as the quirks of the MC are rounded off as he develops (less cheesy). If after that you still don't find it to your taste, fair enough. For the story itself I feel that it's well built, with rich character progression and a diverse world. The story although called Dungeon of Niflheim is not solely about dungeons. It follows the dungeon core itself and his adventures within the world of Nova. There will be dungeon building and dungeon battle elements but they won't really shine until later in the story.

GodKingHuruu
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(chap.49) I am giving an honest review before I drop this story. I don't really know if you have a lot of mistakes in writing b/c my brain just makes it right for me if it isn't to bad, so you get a 5-star for decent writing. Stability of updates, well I found this when it had like 300 chapters already, so you get a 5-star for having a lot of chapters. Story Development....one word, slow, I could see if you wanted to start it off slow and let the reader get used to the dungeon system chakra ect but after chapter 40 I began seeing that this story would probably never speed up, my main reason for dropping, but you get a 3-star b/c I saw the effort at least, just too many unnecessary details, chapters, ect. Character Design, I have only seen what like 16 people, two adventure groups, bandit group + knight, Frost(mc) Maya(mc protector) Dark(god) Light(god) and like 3 other people, and I swear the adventurer group(first one) had more personality than the mc, they were just more fun(to me at least), Maya, I can't really say anything about her, she does nothing, she gets mad sometimes and gets embarrassed sometimes, that's it. Dark/Light god, don't really know anything about them, but that is okay for now, considering that they are gods, and Dark god so far is actually pretty decent. Maybe it was b/c I'm at chapter 49, but I would say take some time to get the main people of the story more depth and personality, I would give you a 2-star but since your a new author I will cut you some slack and give you a 3-star. World Background, something that can make or break your story, this is how I see it, you introduce us to this world that is suppose to be huge many species called Nova, then a few chapters later you dump us with information about where the mc is located all in one chapter and you basically don't really go over it again, at least up till chapter 49, all I really remember was he was in a mountain that had strong monsters the deeper you went, I honestly debated if I should have given you one star for World Background, but I went ahead and gave you a two since you did at least explain it in one chapter and went over albeit very little in later chapters. Don't get the wrong idea, I like the idea of your story and maybe I'll come back and read sometimes b/c at the end of things my entire life is reading, that's what I do for hours upon hours, and your story has a lot of potential, every story does, so keep working hard or don't really your choice, this is like my first real review of a story, so it's a bit long, but hope the authors sees this and tells me if it gets better later on.

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