(chap.49) I am giving an honest review before I drop this story. I don't really know if you have a lot of mistakes in writing b/c my brain just makes it right for me if it isn't to bad, so you get a 5-star for decent writing. Stability of updates, well I found this when it had like 300 chapters already, so you get a 5-star for having a lot of chapters. Story Development....one word, slow, I could see if you wanted to start it off slow and let the reader get used to the dungeon system chakra ect but after chapter 40 I began seeing that this story would probably never speed up, my main reason for dropping, but you get a 3-star b/c I saw the effort at least, just too many unnecessary details, chapters, ect. Character Design, I have only seen what like 16 people, two adventure groups, bandit group + knight, Frost(mc) Maya(mc protector) Dark(god) Light(god) and like 3 other people, and I swear the adventurer group(first one) had more personality than the mc, they were just more fun(to me at least), Maya, I can't really say anything about her, she does nothing, she gets mad sometimes and gets embarrassed sometimes, that's it. Dark/Light god, don't really know anything about them, but that is okay for now, considering that they are gods, and Dark god so far is actually pretty decent. Maybe it was b/c I'm at chapter 49, but I would say take some time to get the main people of the story more depth and personality, I would give you a 2-star but since your a new author I will cut you some slack and give you a 3-star. World Background, something that can make or break your story, this is how I see it, you introduce us to this world that is suppose to be huge many species called Nova, then a few chapters later you dump us with information about where the mc is located all in one chapter and you basically don't really go over it again, at least up till chapter 49, all I really remember was he was in a mountain that had strong monsters the deeper you went, I honestly debated if I should have given you one star for World Background, but I went ahead and gave you a two since you did at least explain it in one chapter and went over albeit very little in later chapters. Don't get the wrong idea, I like the idea of your story and maybe I'll come back and read sometimes b/c at the end of things my entire life is reading, that's what I do for hours upon hours, and your story has a lot of potential, every story does, so keep working hard or don't really your choice, this is like my first real review of a story, so it's a bit long, but hope the authors sees this and tells me if it gets better later on.
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Thank you for the very detailed review, I'm glad you took the time to tell me exactly what you thought about my novel, the and the bad. To answer so of your questions I'm aware that the story is very, very slow. That is intentional to some degree. I aim to reach over 1000 chapters with this book and felt that I needed to explain everything in depth. Of course I understand that this is quite slow especially in the first volume as well as part of the second that's why I made the first 79 chapters free to read instead of the usual 40 or 50. I've not gone into much more detail in the first chapters about Nova and the glacial mountains because it's not really relevant at that time. Frost is still weak, getting his bearings and unable to explore Nova so the focus is primarily on establishing his dungeon and getting started. In volume 2 Frost heads to Furano the nearby town wherein he learns more about Northend, its people, the cost of the things, issues present in territories, becomes an adventurer as well as meeting up with some long term friends. After Chapter 79 theres over 20 chapters of battle action which goes into more detail about skills, weapon mastery and magic. At volume 3 the word count reduces to above 1500 words per chapter instead of the 2000 I was using. This should have helped to pick the pace. This volume also expands on Nova as Frost takes part in the family gathering, meeting his Siblings and his father once again. In volume 4 I have Frost embark into the external regions of the glacial moutains where he learns more about the danger zone where his dungeon resides. The world of Nova is massive and expansive but I explain each part of it gradually in accordance with Frosts strength and personal journey Hopefully that was the response you were looking for. Thank you for your feedback.
To clarify, I don't really care if a story is slow or not, I have read way slower stories, the main point was that I felt some of the characters should be better. I know the mc is like 5 days old so I cut him some slack, and I like the Dark god, but Maya, I can kind of understand what your going for with her character, you just kind of did it wrong, too forced or whatever. Also I really felt like the first adventurer group were the best characters up till were I read (chap 49) and I hope your characters get at least on par or greater tan them. After reading your reply though I'll give this story another try, I usually don't even drop stories worse than this, I hope you focus more on the dungeon aspect instead of the mc adventuring though, I came to this story mainly b/c it was about dungeons after all. PS. Thx for the Reply!!
