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Greg_Holinger
Greg_HolingerLv112yr
2022-05-26 07:30

Like others have said the author includes WAY too many unnecessary details wasting time and basically reducing the length of each chapter in terms of actual things happening the random 'romance' also is just more annoying than anything it's not done in a nice way or a funny way most of the time it's just to be perverted for no other reason and this happens a LOT if there's any female or male character together there's a high chance it will happen which adds in a lot of basically filler also I've read quite a bit of this and maya's defining trait is... alcoholic and that's mostly it also explain why minor spoiler that two I believe rank c adventurers were teaching frost better than Maya was teaching him and Maya and frost also don't have any real chemistry and I mentioned it slightly before but the filler is heavily out of control and is seen in a lot of chapters overall it's not bad but it needs much more work and I hope I'll find it later on in the story

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Sword_immortal1
Sword_immortal1Author

Thank you for the highly detailed review, it seems I still have much to improve upon. Such constructive responses really help.

Greg_Holinger
Greg_HolingerLv11

Something I forgot to mention in my review is that you're having frost be outside the dungeon for waayy too long like 100 chapters since he left and now we're back in the dungeon I really suggest you try to make sure you aren't putting irrelevant things because well it's the reason frost is OUTSIDE the dungeon more than inside anyways have a lovely day I got high hopes for your novel

Sword_immortal1:Thank you for the highly detailed review, it seems I still have much to improve upon. Such constructive responses really help.
Dead_Tired
Dead_TiredLv3

wait what? This supposedly dungeon core is roaming around? it have human body? then forget. I read to many novels about supposedly non-human mc simping for humanoid body, I could understand if they would only having humanoid body time-to-time, unfortunately most of them treated it as their main body wich is annoying and boring.

Greg_Holinger:Something I forgot to mention in my review is that you're having frost be outside the dungeon for waayy too long like 100 chapters since he left and now we're back in the dungeon I really suggest you try to make sure you aren't putting irrelevant things because well it's the reason frost is OUTSIDE the dungeon more than inside anyways have a lovely day I got high hopes for your novel
Greg_Holinger
Greg_HolingerLv11

Yeah the dungeon is kinda secondary it feels like the author is trying to mix adventure romance and a dungeon core all in one so it's like even the author doesn't know what's going on

Dead_Tired:wait what? This supposedly dungeon core is roaming around? it have human body? then forget. I read to many novels about supposedly non-human mc simping for humanoid body, I could understand if they would only having humanoid body time-to-time, unfortunately most of them treated it as their main body wich is annoying and boring.
Dead_Tired
Dead_TiredLv3

It totally kills the main idea about mc being dungeon. what's the point of making him a dungeon when he's doing adventures? Might as well make him a Human with Dungeon master class.

Greg_Holinger:Yeah the dungeon is kinda secondary it feels like the author is trying to mix adventure romance and a dungeon core all in one so it's like even the author doesn't know what's going on
Greg_Holinger
Greg_HolingerLv11

Honestly this novel has an insane amount of flaws like romance that contributes nothing and is just there for horni or pointless details or more filler than Naruto with work (and maybe some help) it could bring thid back from the brink I'll tell ya when this gets better

Dead_Tired:It totally kills the main idea about mc being dungeon. what's the point of making him a dungeon when he's doing adventures? Might as well make him a Human with Dungeon master class.
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Sword_immortal1
Sword_immortal1Author

Author here giving a slightly biased review to help get the ball rolling as well as clarifying a few details. 1) Since English is my first language the grammar and quality of writing is more than readable however, I will make mistakes so please point them out, always appreciate grammar catchers 😁 2) Regarding the issues with the MC I'd like to clarify that regardless of his intelligent or how old his body portrays him to be, he is still a new born. His personality hasn't had a chance to develop and all his emotions are new. He's similar to a child, innocent, curious and prone to exaggerated emotions i.e. may be similar to those cliché Japanese protagonists however that is only in the beginning. 3) Many people have stopped reading the novel, both on web novel and royal road after the first few chapters mainly due to the MC and FMC quirks and they leave comments detailing as such. I would like if you could give the novel a chance, read at least the first dozen or so chapters before casting judgement as the quirks of the MC are rounded off as he develops (less cheesy). If after that you still don't find it to your taste, fair enough. For the story itself I feel that it's well built, with rich character progression and a diverse world. The story although called Dungeon of Niflheim is not solely about dungeons. It follows the dungeon core itself and his adventures within the world of Nova. There will be dungeon building and dungeon battle elements but they won't really shine until later in the story.

GodKingHuruu
GodKingHuruuLv2

(chap.49) I am giving an honest review before I drop this story. I don't really know if you have a lot of mistakes in writing b/c my brain just makes it right for me if it isn't to bad, so you get a 5-star for decent writing. Stability of updates, well I found this when it had like 300 chapters already, so you get a 5-star for having a lot of chapters. Story Development....one word, slow, I could see if you wanted to start it off slow and let the reader get used to the dungeon system chakra ect but after chapter 40 I began seeing that this story would probably never speed up, my main reason for dropping, but you get a 3-star b/c I saw the effort at least, just too many unnecessary details, chapters, ect. Character Design, I have only seen what like 16 people, two adventure groups, bandit group + knight, Frost(mc) Maya(mc protector) Dark(god) Light(god) and like 3 other people, and I swear the adventurer group(first one) had more personality than the mc, they were just more fun(to me at least), Maya, I can't really say anything about her, she does nothing, she gets mad sometimes and gets embarrassed sometimes, that's it. Dark/Light god, don't really know anything about them, but that is okay for now, considering that they are gods, and Dark god so far is actually pretty decent. Maybe it was b/c I'm at chapter 49, but I would say take some time to get the main people of the story more depth and personality, I would give you a 2-star but since your a new author I will cut you some slack and give you a 3-star. World Background, something that can make or break your story, this is how I see it, you introduce us to this world that is suppose to be huge many species called Nova, then a few chapters later you dump us with information about where the mc is located all in one chapter and you basically don't really go over it again, at least up till chapter 49, all I really remember was he was in a mountain that had strong monsters the deeper you went, I honestly debated if I should have given you one star for World Background, but I went ahead and gave you a two since you did at least explain it in one chapter and went over albeit very little in later chapters. Don't get the wrong idea, I like the idea of your story and maybe I'll come back and read sometimes b/c at the end of things my entire life is reading, that's what I do for hours upon hours, and your story has a lot of potential, every story does, so keep working hard or don't really your choice, this is like my first real review of a story, so it's a bit long, but hope the authors sees this and tells me if it gets better later on.

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