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Blacklotus
BlacklotusLv122yr
2022-02-09 18:14

A better novel than most on this site but still gravely lacking: 1) Story proceeds at a snail pace, there are so many filler chapters (with the main character reaching the first level of cultivation at chapter 190) 2) The main character becomes progressively unlikeable (starts betraying his own race because he loves an alien girl) 3) Half the chapters are romance, I did not come here to read a romance story. 4) Cultivation levels are clear but applications of mana are confusing, there is new entire systems of utilisation getting thrown to the reader at random with massive info dumps and repetitions. Grammar is good but the story is so slow I can't recommend this to anyone. From chapter 100 to 200 there has barely been any development.

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TheTrickster12
TheTrickster12Lv14

I agree with everything you've said except the betrays his race for an alien girl, the question is why not? he simply has more importance for the alien girl than his own race which he does not have a good impression of. not only that but he sees aliens and humans to be of the same intellect and sees them as the same for him he's simply choosing the one he loves over a force that he doesn't particularly have loyalties for

Blacklotus
BlacklotusLv12

What do you mean why not? Your race takes prioritity over a girlfriend. He's screwing not only racial diplomacy but also riskint getting executed. This is just dumb.

TheTrickster12:I agree with everything you've said except the betrays his race for an alien girl, the question is why not? he simply has more importance for the alien girl than his own race which he does not have a good impression of. not only that but he sees aliens and humans to be of the same intellect and sees them as the same for him he's simply choosing the one he loves over a force that he doesn't particularly have loyalties for
TheTrickster12
TheTrickster12Lv14

I disagree with the race is more important with his girlfriend. however I agree he should have been cautious of the retaliation of the association

Blacklotus:What do you mean why not? Your race takes prioritity over a girlfriend. He's screwing not only racial diplomacy but also riskint getting executed. This is just dumb.
Demelios
DemeliosLv14

Oh and maybe you didn't come to read a romance story. But next time check the tags before hand tch. I didn't come to see half nude girls, he said. After entering a striptease bar.

Demelios
DemeliosLv14

The confusing mana system? Completely normal. Why? Little spoiler. Because even the Characters are still learning new way to use mana! It could be a living entity for all we know!

Uncle_Sheogorath
Uncle_SheogorathLv4

The human race is like family when there are alien species. By your logic, your real family is no different from a stranger.

TheTrickster12:I disagree with the race is more important with his girlfriend. however I agree he should have been cautious of the retaliation of the association
TheTrickster12
TheTrickster12Lv14

By your logic a complete stranger whom you absolutely don't know but is part of your race automatically makes them worth more than someone whom you love and care for however is not part of your race.

Uncle_Sheogorath:The human race is like family when there are alien species. By your logic, your real family is no different from a stranger.
Uncle_Sheogorath
Uncle_SheogorathLv4

Ah, I see where you going at. Trying to twist my logic here. Tells a lot about a person who thinks their own family has the same value as random strangers.

TheTrickster12:By your logic a complete stranger whom you absolutely don't know but is part of your race automatically makes them worth more than someone whom you love and care for however is not part of your race.
TheTrickster12
TheTrickster12Lv14

Hm, how are complete strangers the same as their own family? strangers that you don't know anything about nor care for; yet you claim they're above someone whom you do care and love for.

Uncle_Sheogorath:Ah, I see where you going at. Trying to twist my logic here. Tells a lot about a person who thinks their own family has the same value as random strangers.
Uncle_Sheogorath
Uncle_SheogorathLv4

Can you read? What are you talking about?

TheTrickster12:Hm, how are complete strangers the same as their own family? strangers that you don't know anything about nor care for; yet you claim they're above someone whom you do care and love for.
TheTrickster12
TheTrickster12Lv14

my exact same question, seriously do I need to dumb down my words for you? my question is quite easy to understand and not complicated at all yet you seem confused when the question is so simple "how are strangers whom you know absolutely nothing about, considered "family" just because they're part of your race."

Uncle_Sheogorath:Can you read? What are you talking about?
Uncle_Sheogorath
Uncle_SheogorathLv4

Are you human? Let me give you an example idiot. For example, humans and dogs are not comparable as they are different species. Pretty simple concept to understand. The same one could apply to aliens who are of different species to humans. Hence all humans might as well be 'family' because we are the same species and are very familiar compared to the alien. You arrogant idiot!

TheTrickster12:my exact same question, seriously do I need to dumb down my words for you? my question is quite easy to understand and not complicated at all yet you seem confused when the question is so simple "how are strangers whom you know absolutely nothing about, considered "family" just because they're part of your race."
TheTrickster12
TheTrickster12Lv14

well it could only be said that you are an idiot, How can you compare an intelligent creature to a dog that is completely different from humans in terms of body structure and intelligence, when the aliens described in the novel are much too similar to humans wether it be intelligence or body structure with the main difference being culture and technology.

Uncle_Sheogorath:Are you human? Let me give you an example idiot. For example, humans and dogs are not comparable as they are different species. Pretty simple concept to understand. The same one could apply to aliens who are of different species to humans. Hence all humans might as well be 'family' because we are the same species and are very familiar compared to the alien. You arrogant idiot!
Uncle_Sheogorath
Uncle_SheogorathLv4

Nice, now you insult me. My point stands. From what I can see you basically compare aliens to 'funny space humans' or just another earth culture/race.

TheTrickster12:well it could only be said that you are an idiot, How can you compare an intelligent creature to a dog that is completely different from humans in terms of body structure and intelligence, when the aliens described in the novel are much too similar to humans wether it be intelligence or body structure with the main difference being culture and technology.
TheTrickster12
TheTrickster12Lv14

well since it seems like this is not going anywhere lets end it here since it's obvious that the moment something is of another race you'd immediately have extreme bias against it.

Uncle_Sheogorath:Nice, now you insult me. My point stands. From what I can see you basically compare aliens to 'funny space humans' or just another earth culture/race.
Uncle_Sheogorath
Uncle_SheogorathLv4

[img=faceslap] you can talk. I am talking about aliens. But someone is bringing in human races?! Someone else here has a problem for real. Maybe someone called trikster?

TheTrickster12:well since it seems like this is not going anywhere lets end it here since it's obvious that the moment something is of another race you'd immediately have extreme bias against it.
AuthoriTet
AuthoriTetLv4

I can feel for the emperor vibes

Blacklotus:What do you mean why not? Your race takes prioritity over a girlfriend. He's screwing not only racial diplomacy but also riskint getting executed. This is just dumb.
AuthoriTet
AuthoriTetLv4

Although I haven't read the story yet, I can understand his perspective and, based on what I've read in this discussion, I agree with him. Race should not come before his family, and this includes his partner, regardless of race.

Uncle_Sheogorath:[img=faceslap] you can talk. I am talking about aliens. But someone is bringing in human races?! Someone else here has a problem for real. Maybe someone called trikster?
yug_moto
yug_motoLv1

I want to add my point of view that I have on this site, what counts in the rating is almost always 4-5 in most stories on the site why? it should be a way to protect the writer but honestly i can't find good stories on this site it's hard. (Note: I've been reading for more than 5 years so I'm looking for at least an average story with some differential and mcs with an average human being's IQ.)

Blacklotus
BlacklotusLv12

Sadly, that is true. There are some good novels on this website but most of them are translated (and even then most of the translations are trash). Good original novels with actually good plot are few and far in between. The issue is that the average reader base seems to like this kind of 0 effort novels so it has become a problem.

yug_moto:I want to add my point of view that I have on this site, what counts in the rating is almost always 4-5 in most stories on the site why? it should be a way to protect the writer but honestly i can't find good stories on this site it's hard. (Note: I've been reading for more than 5 years so I'm looking for at least an average story with some differential and mcs with an average human being's IQ.)
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shacochan
shacochanLv13

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