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2021-04-28 12:08

My review till the tatest chapter. (10) The plot was good, atleast it makes sense and unique. The grammar was great, there isn't that many of a mistake. The characters has life into it, the type you can read them with a color(metaphor). Keep writing and I'll give you my support.

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SinnedToHeaven
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ps-this review represents only me meaning, I dont know about others thoughts and only my view on this story without being biased. Writing quality is spectacular! The story was really enjoyable, it made me excited and hyped until the chapter 20, or 30. In the first dozen chapter mc's tragic story, and love story was so. amazing that'll undoubtedly put the novel in the 1st place in ff. everything was perfect until the mc started to train the che, and lingxi. dont get me wrong, I didn't mind that, cuz it can be ignored although lingering small amount of uncomfortable . however, the romance between them irritates me. It would be fine if che would go with some other girl without going out with lingxi, the *major character*. Its totally logical that they go out with each other, however, it's stopped becoming enjoyable because in the first place the mc and qingyue was the main point, then there is some other character's romance making it the stealing the lime light. what I mean is, it's totally unnecessary to show romance that doesn't include the mc , because the PLOT doesn't need it. What? you trying to making lingxi and che's romance SUB-PLOT?... It wouldn't be a problem if you just said. che got a girlfriend from the town. Because romance between major character outside of mc is fracking unnecessary, and it totally irritates me. the initial hype dyed down and now I only skim through the chapter to see the ending paragraph. in the end, the ff was the best I've read until 'that' came out. Also mc sharing his achievements with qingyue and che kind turned me off. I,know I know, the mc thinks that they've become his siblings but, Even if it's logical it just a plain text if it's not fun.

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